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Slavethruhypno@yahoo.com
6/16/17, 4:58 AM
It feels good to obey orders without thinking.
redbird
6/16/17, 4:44 AM
I agree with the first comment that was dark and a little anticlimactic.
Anonymous
6/16/17, 4:40 AM
Great series! Love these stories.
Anonymous
6/16/17, 4:39 AM
That was dark!
6/16/17, 4:20 AM
Yes I am British
Rider Vitalli
6/16/17, 2:08 AM
Thanks HyperMuscleMonster! I'll be honest with you, this, like most of my ideas, was intended to be a one off. Hell, it started as a caption for a picture I'd seen on Tumblr! I could see it being continued, and yeah, I'll agree, it does lack the sex aspect that most readers crave... Maybe, at some point, I'll explore the idea again! If you'd like to chat about it, my email is provided, and I'd also be okie with skype or Kik, let me know!
HyperMuscleMonster
6/16/17, 1:48 AM
Good work! I could see this continuing if the old guy comes back, kidnaps him again when he goes off to college, and kicks him up another hundred pounds of muscle, plus more mental changes. Go all out. Plus more sexual changes, we only got the lightest hints it was turning him on, need more of that. ;)
Rider Vitalli
6/16/17, 1:16 AM
Thank you!! Means alot! Yeah, having to convert it a bit to fit this site's guidelines, and doing so in the last 10 minutes at work definitely left it a bit of a rush job. Duly noted for next time! Thanks for the advice as well, always nice to get constructive criticism ^_^ helps writers improve!
Anonymous
6/16/17, 1:09 AM
Hot story! Love the theme of being made into an extreme stereotype of a Man by force! Minor criticism: A tiny loss of continuity when you made the main character 18. (Good call btw) I think you might have maintained the same story spirit as your cyoc original by making the party-goers college seniors, and perhaps add more color around how 'undeveloped' the 18 year old was when he started. Other than that it was great!
Anonymous
6/16/17, 12:58 AM
Amazing story. I'm a big fan of this ☺️