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Rider Vitalli
6/16/17, 2:08 AM
Thanks HyperMuscleMonster! I'll be honest with you, this, like most of my ideas, was intended to be a one off. Hell, it started as a caption for a picture I'd seen on Tumblr! I could see it being continued, and yeah, I'll agree, it does lack the sex aspect that most readers crave... Maybe, at some point, I'll explore the idea again! If you'd like to chat about it, my email is provided, and I'd also be okie with skype or Kik, let me know!
HyperMuscleMonster
6/16/17, 1:48 AM
Good work! I could see this continuing if the old guy comes back, kidnaps him again when he goes off to college, and kicks him up another hundred pounds of muscle, plus more mental changes. Go all out. Plus more sexual changes, we only got the lightest hints it was turning him on, need more of that. ;)
Rider Vitalli
6/16/17, 1:16 AM
Thank you!! Means alot! Yeah, having to convert it a bit to fit this site's guidelines, and doing so in the last 10 minutes at work definitely left it a bit of a rush job. Duly noted for next time! Thanks for the advice as well, always nice to get constructive criticism ^_^ helps writers improve!
Anonymous
6/16/17, 1:09 AM
Hot story! Love the theme of being made into an extreme stereotype of a Man by force! Minor criticism: A tiny loss of continuity when you made the main character 18. (Good call btw) I think you might have maintained the same story spirit as your cyoc original by making the party-goers college seniors, and perhaps add more color around how 'undeveloped' the 18 year old was when he started. Other than that it was great!
Anonymous
6/16/17, 12:58 AM
Amazing story. I'm a big fan of this ☺️
rubberdrone
6/16/17, 12:21 AM
I'm eager to hear about the drone's experience and conversion!
Anonymous
6/15/17, 9:44 PM
@TandySensation: is that sarcasm or seriousness? You start off saying the story is great but then rip right into it. Also, anyone can edit the tags. If you feel a rape tag is called for, you can just add one yourself.
Anonymous
6/15/17, 9:41 PM
Growing up in shadows of the city it rings in memories also .the part where he scans brain for memories has me wondering why . Overall great series so far Willie hope there is more Would like a real good twist in reasons these goomba's where chosen
6/15/17, 9:33 PM
Great story thanks!!
TandySensation
6/15/17, 9:26 PM
Great story. The ending was confusing and abrupt. All of a sudden, La'mar and Darnell's awkward encounter turned into nonconsensual intercourse. I started imagining... "Wow. Now La'mar will have to come to terms with being raped, in addition to turning black. The story can't end with rape, so I guess in chapter 5, La'mar will finally grow into a real three-dimensional member of a black gay community. Oh nevermind, he likes being raped. {cums}" Please add a tag for "rape," so as not to confuse impressionable young virgins that might think saying "no" to sex doesn't count if deep down, your body "wants it."