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Anonymous
6/10/17, 8:50 PM
NB first sentence. "Came too" = also came, "came to" = regained consciousness
Anonymous
6/10/17, 8:11 PM
Awesome work!!
Anonymous
6/10/17, 7:10 PM
great story!!
Anonymous
6/10/17, 6:59 PM
Loved the story! Please consider writing a longer version! I absolutely loved the premise/reality shift based on insults
Anonymous
6/10/17, 3:28 PM
amazing job . Hope we get something similar
Anonymous
6/10/17, 2:03 PM
Fantastic
TimNJ
6/10/17, 9:59 AM
Another hot story but if you dont mind me asking did you use a subway map or what? The actual name of the stop is New Utrecht Ave and that's the next stop after my own; so besides being in my mind, your stories are now in my neighborhood! You were spot on with Vinnie, Paulie and the Puerto Rican neighbor. Add some Middle Eastern or Asian men for your next installment and you'll have really all the men in the neighborhood covered lol.
Anonymous
6/10/17, 5:25 AM
Great story!! I would suggest you could introduce one or two friends of Bradley with name; yes, sequels!! Hope one of them got suspicious about Cauch's secret program due to Bradley's change and try to investigate. In the end, Bradley, now loyal to Coach and the Team, caught his friend and transformed him into another jock.
ChaoticDjinn
6/10/17, 3:42 AM
Side note voice to text on my phone sucks.
ChaoticDjinn
6/10/17, 3:30 AM
I have heard of the rule of three it comes up in most literary entities . That's the rub of writing commissions I think. Both my stories posted on here had to be between a specific range of characters and future certain things, so I couldn't have things exactly how I wanted them if I writing a story with no limitations. My next thing on here will probably be something that I just write for myself. Thanks for the feedback.