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Anonymous
6/7/17, 2:10 AM
Great and intense. One of the best you did xoxo
Anonymous
6/7/17, 2:02 AM
By any chance, Vin had been a slender college guy? The man did have a great choice!! So cool.
Anonymous
6/7/17, 1:46 AM
Great introduction!! Can't wait to see how the man controlled Vinnie and how Vinnie trapped his friends.
Anonymous
6/7/17, 1:26 AM
Dirk was hot from the beginning. Wish you could have had more mind control and hypnosys elements here.
Anonymous
6/7/17, 1:20 AM
F Line? F**k...
Anonymous
6/7/17, 1:19 AM
ShredExtreme, awesome naming. So sexy.
Anonymous
6/7/17, 1:18 AM
Interesting setting!! I'm envious that they were safeguarded by Dirk's inherited wealth. I personally love a nerd to jock, more drastic, change. Still, this one is hot. Please try introducing a mastermind, an apparent evil, who develop and use drugs (protein/steroid/narcotics) against the protagonist and utilize his transformation to promote his plan (creating a mindless trainer or PR model or vampire/zombie creature and expand his minions).
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6/6/17, 11:32 PM
I am incredibly aroused
Willie Cici
6/6/17, 9:50 PM
"The Man" has a name. It will be disclosed in later chapters. For now, he's "the Man."
Anonymous
6/6/17, 9:38 PM
I really liked that a young man was behind it all.