Recent Comments

May 19, 2017
Anonymous
5/19/17, 5:48 PM
Wow great story!!! very nice! hope soon read continue... but please!!! more muscle... more dumb... and less hair :-) better a dumb bodybuilder Jock ahahah ;-) let see if Coach put him on stage!!!
May 19, 2017
5/19/17, 5:47 PM
Welcome back, Great story so far, I can't wait for more
May 19, 2017
xORRiNx
5/19/17, 5:38 PM
I have always gone the route of slow and subtle. A majority of readers will likely dislike that. Excitement at the beginning of a real life transformation I've found is unrealistic.
May 19, 2017
Anonymous
5/19/17, 5:17 PM
I liked the progress overall. It's nice seeing the subtle changes going on. Granted, I'm not a fan of reading about porn or sex, so I try to skip past those areas when mentioned, but it's clear that you can see the changes happening bit by bit. Well done.
TheWanderer
5/19/17, 5:09 PM
Just pointing out: Sam's problem with his boss/work is still unsolved since they don't remember anything
Anonymous
5/19/17, 4:08 PM
Form and substance, the two parts of every story Substance -- incredible. This was a great story. The pace and the sex was great. Form -- When you write, that's part 1. Part 2 is 'edit'. Part 2 lasts longer than Part 1. Especially if English is not your first language, use MSWord and the review tools that will check spelling, grammar and usage. It will greatly improve your story and make it more readable.
Willie Cici
5/19/17, 3:58 PM
I hope this sequel that people suggested fits the bill. Enjoy!!
Anonymous
5/19/17, 3:54 PM
Fun story!!
May 19, 2017
Anonymous
5/19/17, 3:53 PM
This was so slow and plodding that I lost interest.
Marvyn
5/19/17, 3:00 PM
Part 5 is there now; it disappeared because I wasn't happy with a few things and edited it. Thanks for the positive feedback. I'm working on a new story called 'Incubus' if you wish to check it out...