Recent Comments

Anonymous
5/11/17, 7:46 AM
This one was awesome! As it is usually with your stories. Don't let this bei a one shot. Jerry had countless other families before and I would love to hear from them. At one point it would be amazing if Jerry could bring some of these families together for a mass, so to speak
fan
5/11/17, 6:36 AM
so goooood! I hope you keep writing because I love your stories!
Anonymous
5/11/17, 5:58 AM
The story was a nice beginning, but as a minor detail it always bugs me to see the word "serum" misused. It's not just "stuff that is injected", it specifically means plasma extracted from blood with clotting proteins removed. Makes one wonder what the source was when the stuff glowed blue. On second thought, perhaps there's a story in that too? :-)
Anonymous
5/11/17, 5:05 AM
Great story, I hope we find out the serum's contagiously spread through bodily fluids in the next chapter...
Boone
5/11/17, 4:36 AM
WOW! I mean, WOW! You're really good on this, Edlam! Honestly, I don't like the stories that involves some kind of incest, but I like your stories. I don't know why, but for some reason I find very exciting when a character is renamed with a condescending, parodic,or plainly ridiculous name. I don't know, maybe it's because it means that the dominant character gets total control over the victim and his life. Would be interesting to read another chapter of this story, with different characters and situations.
Marvyn
5/11/17, 4:27 AM
Thanks to all for the very positive feedback which is very motivating to me to and helps me carry on with the story. The first part is there now - hope you like it. In answer to Boone, I've been writing bits and pieces for several years, but only as a hobby. I've never published anything before. I'm a bit of a perfectionist and I like to go over what I write several times, editing until it's as perfect as it can be. I've just fixed a continuity error in part 3 that I only noticed when it was up here. Please let me know if I get any American stuff wrong - I've visited that fine country, but I'm from the UK.
Anonymous
5/11/17, 3:17 AM
Finally, someone working his craft and telling a hot, sexy story. Great job!! Keep it up!!
Anonymous
5/11/17, 3:04 AM
I really hope the tables don't get turned here. That kills a story for me
Anonymous
5/11/17, 2:30 AM
My dick is hard!
Boone
5/11/17, 1:19 AM
So hot indeed! When we'll see the next part? this is going wonderfully! I wonder how trashy and ghetto Jevon will become? You're gonna mess his handsome features?