Recent Comments

Anonymous
4/21/17, 12:39 AM
I love this hope there's more to come
Robert M
4/20/17, 11:42 PM
Thanks for the positive comments... Working on part two
Robert M
4/20/17, 11:40 PM
Thanks
Anonymous
4/20/17, 6:12 PM
Scotts been dealt with nicely. Time for him to start wearing just compression shorts and muscle shirts. . since Scotts no more than a jock toy now, maybe Chris can start breaking Jake
havi
4/20/17, 6:03 PM
oh god, way too short :( i was about to request some piss, because that and the... other stuff is the hardest humiliation and then you already had that in, so hot. I love hypno stories with awarness, otherwise there is no humiliation, best story here
4/20/17, 4:21 PM
I visualized them completely naked so yeah they're barefooted.
Apr 20, 2017
Anonymous
4/20/17, 4:06 PM
Awesome
Apr 20, 2017
Anonymous
4/20/17, 2:57 PM
Great story! Loved it!!
Apr 20, 2017
TheWanderer
4/20/17, 2:44 PM
Nice~~~
Cliff
4/20/17, 2:25 PM
Hi Lloyd, first of all, because I'm not too into humiliation, so I just read the teaser, and my opinions are somewhat more about techniques than plots, because I don't think I can fairly judge the story/teaser is good or not. 1. I guess some descriptions about body/face/etc, can blend into somewhere between dialogues. I prefer that way because I don't have to read / remember all that characteristics immediately, I can see some actions, build some passion about chars first. 2. It's seems a 3rd person narrative story, so I guess there could be some more "inner thought" from every char. The physical humiliation is hot, but the mindset of "I shouldn't like it but I can't help myself " is hot too. Wondering if there are more about "Tommy / Peter / other chars thought " in the full story, because it's somewhat lack of in the teaser. 3. The US, Canada Amazon links, that last line of excerpt ( "and scorching hot alternate reality. ") is missing, maybe you'd like to modify them. I hope these comments could help you :)