Recent Comments

9/3/24, 11:56 AM
All these comments saying they are disappointed in this story are wild. This story is very well written and you should be proud of that. It is obviously not finished yet so nobody should be saying it's going to be a "downer" because we don't know what will happen. You have obviously set up this story and only you know where it is going. I for one have a feeling that the reason Rob is acting the way he is, is because whatever was in that box may have affected him as well? I don't know and neither do any of the other readers. Good job writing this! I cannot wait to see it finished.

9/3/24, 12:17 PM
@[MrSirTurtle](/user/show/910203) I think nobody said they were disappointed? I certainly am not disappointed, I praised the writing on its high quality, I just said that it feels like it's going in a downer direction because the story is taking seriously how Alex is affected emotionally – in turn emotionally affecting me _as a reader_ . All this to say that I think it's very very well written, just going in a darker direction which is absolutely valid.

9/3/24, 12:59 PM
@[MrSirTurtle](/user/show/910203) I'm glad you're enjoying it. I'm finding the comments really constructive, I don't get the feeling other readers are disappointed in the writing, but maybe that it has moved in a direction that they did not expect to be so dark. I will continue to stick to my vision without compromising my writing style too much. I am learning though! This is my first ever story, and I really wanted to give these characters some dimension. I might have made them a bit too real that it pulls readers out of experiencing it as a fantasy. I'm glad it has resonated with others, regardless. Thanks for your support :)
9/2/24, 9:46 PM
I really enjoy the premise of the story, so for that I will keep reading, and your writing is pretty good all in all; but damn is this one building up to be a downer, huh? I definitely do like seeing the perspective of what mind control does not just to the mind controlled – but the psychological effects it has on the mind controller – that being said the sense of gnawing guilt and sadness, which is amazingly well written by the way, is definitely hitting to close to home for me to find any genuine erotic enjoyment out of this chapter.

9/3/24, 5:31 AM
@[TheSatanScully](/user/show/917743) I don't think he really feels anymore guilt or sadness. Alex describes him not looking genuinely sorry

9/3/24, 5:38 AM
@[Reader](/user/show/780823) Yeah, I guess I didn't properly convey my thoughts. I didn't mean that Rob had guilt and sadness, more that the chapter conveyed Alex's plight with the type of _care that makes me as a reader_, feel guilt and sadness. This story is very much doing the whole bit about the idea of whether power corrupts or if power reveals, this chapter is very much the point of no return for them.

9/3/24, 12:45 PM
@[TheSatanScully](/user/show/917743) I fear I let my own experiences seep too much into the writing in this chapter. I'm a psychologist by day and am learning to write by night. My writing will likely always have a heavy psychological element to it because it is just so ingrained in how I think. The general response from this story is really interesting to me, because (at least to me) there are stories on here that are so much more extreme (see: Edlam's amazing works), but I might have humanised Rob and Alex a bit too much for people to enjoy it. I am still learning to strike the right balance between what's hot and what's engaging. It's tricky because I LOVE the internal dialogue, the changes in the way we think as situations change. But I do want others to enjoy the ride as well! I do have a vision for this story and I plan to see that through. I have lots of ideas for other stories to tell, so if this one is not for you, I might be able to entice you with others! Thank you again. I appreciate you taking the time give me some feedback.

9/3/24, 12:54 PM
@[Whisperlouder](/user/show/2186797) Oh by all means, don't take it as a complaint, I am genuinely enthralled by your writing and the plot as a whole. I thought of it too about what you mention about you being a psychologist, and I actually think that the fact that you so successfully have gotten such a response due to your characters feeling so vibrant and alive is nothing but high props for that! I also totally get you about that balance, I had a story I posted on the site sometime ago that essentially boiled down to a psychologist predating on his patients, and while my first 2 chapters got a mostly positive reception, the third one – seeing as It used the real life 12 step plan for addiction mostly associated with AA and rehab as the framework for the brainwashing to take place – affected some readers and got a far more mixed reception.
Anonymous
9/2/24, 11:16 PM
I gotta say that a master tripping on his own power is a turn on for me, and it's written so thoroughly in this story that I'm really excited to see where this goes! Still, I'd love to see some of the outside influences start to fuck with Alex and even Rob. It'd be hot to see Rob's slave be owned and humiliated by the intern at work, forced to do even more depraved behavior than Rob was demanding. Maybe that would snap Rob back towards a more sympathetic pov and he would have to save the man he'd previously been abusing?

9/3/24, 12:34 PM
@Anonymous It is a trope that really gets me going too. Hope you liked it!
Lavender Lad
9/2/24, 10:23 PM
Have to concur with the comment above me, this is so realistically well written that it's very difficult to get any erotic enjoyment out of it. I totally didn't expect the first few paragraphs turning something I thought was hot the previous chapter into something absolutely heart wrenching. It reminds me of a similar story on this site which followed a similar "loss of free will" plot line that also started hot but got very difficult to read as it went on. However despite all of that just like that story I am now very invested in how this tale will end and that there will hopefully atleast be a good ending for Alex, much less so for Rob.

9/3/24, 12:33 PM
@[Lavender Lad](/user/show/10019272) Thanks so much for reading and for your feedback. I'm very much finding the balance between writing things that are hot and writing material that is also engaging. It's clear that I need some work to find my voice and strike a balance that others enjoy too. Having said that, I try to consider any and all feedback, but also try to stick to the vision that I have in my mind. I try not to comment too much because I'm scared I'll give too much away, but I have a conclusion in mind. I hope you continue to enjoy, but if you decide that it's not for you, that's OK too! Thanks for taking the time to read it up to this point :)
9/3/24, 12:12 PM
i love the story... especially the pheromone elements... i liked the curved pecs. i love your writing!
Anonymous
9/3/24, 11:50 AM
Great chapter! Things have really ramped up. The steamy scenes are really well written. I like the characters, and how they've already become so close. Very interested to see where things go with them and the circumstances of their magic deal. I wonder if Kyle is getting an unintended boon, gaining as much or even more confidence than he's giving up because unlike what Conner is losing, it's possible confidence may not be finite, but I could be totally off. Either way, thanks for writing and sharing!
oxly
9/3/24, 9:58 AM
this story was pretty damn hot, but what really got me was the small bottle of Passion 😅 i've got the same one and it made me blush thinking about being like Roy
Jul 23, 2024
9/3/24, 7:11 AM
I love your stories! Domination and mind control through hypnosis, drugs, etc. are my primary kinks. Pure sex porn is not nearly as interesting for me as erotic stories with a well developed plot and character development. You do it all incredibly well. Hypnosis by itself seems to take a lot of time and repetition to develop a strong reaction, and even then often seems subtle. The combination of hypnosis along with drugs which apparently muddy the normal psychological processes and augment suggestibility is a potent story cocktail which makes its reality harder to judge. It seems to free up my mind to accept things as reality. The only thing i hate about your stories so far is that as soon as you seem to really get the story and me really wound up, you end the chapter and are so incredibly slow to continue (i sincerely hope!) the story. i feel like my imagination is being edged to the verge of orgasm and then dropped without even a ruined orgasm. When i started this story with the hot guys and mysterious bottle at the bar and read the first few paragraphs, i was excited to post the image and a link to the story on my own blog to promote your story and writing. i still want to do that, but until the story is longer i can't bring myself to do it. Meanwhile i will be hoping and not so patiently waiting for additional chapters. ******************************************************************************** So, after perusing your story list i realize you have written or at least posted all of these early chapters of the various stories in the last half of July this year. I apologize for giving you a hard time for not adding chapters to your stories faster. But i do have to wonder if you have already written much more than what you have posted, and perhaps have even posted these stories on other sites. Have you published any of your stories elsewhere?
9/2/24, 7:34 PM
I'm so giving Col and Eddie a conventional happy ending on the dragon what if story

Pcm
9/3/24, 5:31 AM
@[darkblade2814](/user/show/243317) What would a conventional ending even be in this context though? 😀

9/3/24, 6:40 AM
@[Pcm](/user/show/10039396) Remember, the dragons are turning people so they can avoid the Canon story, also I think I can make it work
9/3/24, 6:06 AM
My favorite part of the story. I remember wishing it would continue, and I still feel that way!