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MalSkin
3/28/17, 4:20 PM
loved this story slowly did it for Edward
swc158@yahoo.com
3/28/17, 4:13 PM
After 3 years, I suppose is against all hope to see a follow up chapter. Too bad, because I really liked this start.
Mar 25, 2017
Monstermash62
3/28/17, 3:04 PM
@Donkbutt I got significant feedback from people when I posted a teaser for my last paid work (Retroactive Changes) that people felt upset that they read through an entire chapter of a story only to find out that they'd have to pay to read the rest. The flashing red is intentionally ugly (and a little obnoxious) to ensure that no one is mislead by my post.
Mar 25, 2017
Monstermash62
3/28/17, 3:01 PM
@HyperMuscleMonster I hear you about getting turned on at the gym and totally get that :) I personally really enjoy slow transformations, of both the mind and the body. I think that Aardvark (console.aws.amazon.com) actually does them the best. It's definitely not my skill. I might try to play with teasing stuff out longer, and exploring more kinks and extremes in my next story. I also totally agree with you about the alternate ending. I didn't build to it in the regular story before the branch properly, and it was out of character and way too extreme. I also wasn't personally interested in the taboo, nonstandard attraction angle, but that was the only place to go with it. I do find amoral, non-empathic villains to be extremely hot, if they don't go too far. But the alternate ending was definitely not a great ending, and definitely not what I felt comfortable getting people to pay for (given the rest of the story). Thanks for all of the feedback!!!
Apr 21, 2016
Anonymous
3/28/17, 1:47 PM
But....what happened to the kitty!
Mar 25, 2017
Donkbutt
3/28/17, 1:16 PM
Why do we get flashing red text and top of the page promotions for paid story teasers? It's really obnoxious.
Papa Werebear
3/28/17, 12:30 PM
Cubwriter28, I'm so very turned on by your writing. Love the Bear transformations. You are doing a great job! 🐻 keep writing!
TheWanderer
3/28/17, 11:08 AM
I'm thinking something that involve a succubus (so that all the guys see the succubus as their ideal type). Either how they will compete with each other to seduce the succubus. Or the succubus tell them in order to have her, they have to do something (i.e. fuck the other guys and don't get fuck. Something like that)
Anonymous
3/28/17, 8:52 AM
Not sure about how to chose the winners but I think the losers should lose something say they cock size 😈
Mar 25, 2017
HyperMuscleMonster
3/28/17, 7:06 AM
A long story works, even in erotic fic, as long as there are sexual interludes every so often, IMO. I read this over the course of a day or so, usually when I'd want to get off (whether or not I actually ID is a different issue). I actually read a portion of it at the gym, between a few sets (since getting turned on pumps your internal test levels a bit). I was focused on lifting, so it's not like I was boning up in public, but it did boost my charge a bit, upped my rep ranges on one exercise by a good 20%. My personal preference would have been to see maybe a progressive growth, easing it out a bit, like pushing them to just above average, then deciding they want more, muscle, virility, sexy body hair (I like hairy/bearded guys), rather than all at once. Growing more extreme, more over-the-top, over time, and going even huger than where they were, maybe exploring other fetish ideas. I could even see going 'too far' in some way, and then using a reversal wish to go back or in a different direction. My big complaint about the alternate ending (and fair warning here, maybe a killjoy for some, and spoiler warning) is that while it's *possible*, it requires a major lack in humane empathy in that character. It's a hot *fantasy*, but it lacks the guilt and emotional consequences that most people would (eventually) feel in that situation. One might be that vindictive in the heat of the moment, but over time, self-doubt would make you realize that this kind of action is wrong. Plus, it was a pretty major sudden turn, going from unexpected nonstandard attraction (which, while taboo, isn't really morally *wrong*) to outright psychopathic control and vengeful destruction of personhood to people who were nominally his friends before.