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Apr 21, 2016
Anonymous
3/28/17, 1:47 PM
But....what happened to the kitty!
Mar 25, 2017
Donkbutt
3/28/17, 1:16 PM
Why do we get flashing red text and top of the page promotions for paid story teasers? It's really obnoxious.
Papa Werebear
3/28/17, 12:30 PM
Cubwriter28, I'm so very turned on by your writing. Love the Bear transformations. You are doing a great job! 🐻 keep writing!
TheWanderer
3/28/17, 11:08 AM
I'm thinking something that involve a succubus (so that all the guys see the succubus as their ideal type). Either how they will compete with each other to seduce the succubus. Or the succubus tell them in order to have her, they have to do something (i.e. fuck the other guys and don't get fuck. Something like that)
Anonymous
3/28/17, 8:52 AM
Not sure about how to chose the winners but I think the losers should lose something say they cock size 😈
Mar 25, 2017
HyperMuscleMonster
3/28/17, 7:06 AM
A long story works, even in erotic fic, as long as there are sexual interludes every so often, IMO. I read this over the course of a day or so, usually when I'd want to get off (whether or not I actually ID is a different issue). I actually read a portion of it at the gym, between a few sets (since getting turned on pumps your internal test levels a bit). I was focused on lifting, so it's not like I was boning up in public, but it did boost my charge a bit, upped my rep ranges on one exercise by a good 20%. My personal preference would have been to see maybe a progressive growth, easing it out a bit, like pushing them to just above average, then deciding they want more, muscle, virility, sexy body hair (I like hairy/bearded guys), rather than all at once. Growing more extreme, more over-the-top, over time, and going even huger than where they were, maybe exploring other fetish ideas. I could even see going 'too far' in some way, and then using a reversal wish to go back or in a different direction. My big complaint about the alternate ending (and fair warning here, maybe a killjoy for some, and spoiler warning) is that while it's *possible*, it requires a major lack in humane empathy in that character. It's a hot *fantasy*, but it lacks the guilt and emotional consequences that most people would (eventually) feel in that situation. One might be that vindictive in the heat of the moment, but over time, self-doubt would make you realize that this kind of action is wrong. Plus, it was a pretty major sudden turn, going from unexpected nonstandard attraction (which, while taboo, isn't really morally *wrong*) to outright psychopathic control and vengeful destruction of personhood to people who were nominally his friends before.
Anonymous
3/28/17, 5:59 AM
Love this story :-) hope you write some more of these . Maybe one where he Telling a couple of already captured Heroes to play with each other before putting them under again :-)
Anonymous
3/28/17, 5:17 AM
Love love. Love it . Please give us more.
Anonymous
3/28/17, 5:03 AM
I love when farting is incorporated into these type of stories, don't see alot of furry stuff here! I love it!! Made a big mess! Keep it up ;3
Mar 25, 2017
Monstermash62
3/28/17, 4:13 AM
Thanks for the comments, HyperMuscleMonster. I wrote all of Fish, and then after talking to Absqrst, decided that it definitely could've gone in a different direction. That's where the alt ending came from. Hopefully the original ending gave you enough of a sense of justice. I'm kicking around the idea of a sequel. It would probably be from Stu's perspective though, as opposed to Ash's. Haven't worked out any details yet. Could be from Ash's, possibly. Have to come up with some kind of character arch first. And even then, it'll probably take me another 3 years. In terms of the TFs progressing further, what would you have liked to see more of? More jocking out? More muscle? More time spent with the main characters enjoying everyone else's reaction to them? I'm a little surprised (kind of pleasantly) that most readers wanted to read more of any of it. I was worried that 60K words would be way too long.