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9/2/24, 1:11 PM
The biggest problem is having to wait for the next chapter.

9/2/24, 3:42 PM
@[Corin](/user/show/125990) I just checked. Chapter 3 will be posted some time on September 4th. From that point on, a new chapter should post every 3 days. And in total, this series has nine chapters. Every chapter has been edited and submitted for GSS for publishing. But yeah ... sorry about the wait. I've never agreed with Netflix's model to release content all at once. This way, it allows readers to read the stories, and hopefully give some kind of comment to the author. I learned that when stories are published all at once, it's hard for the author to gauge whether their stories worked or didn't work.

9/2/24, 4:08 PM
@[rubbrsome](/user/show/13662) No, it's fine... I actually prefer it that way, too. And you're publishing it quickly enough. To publish the whole series all at once would be overwhelming for my dick anyway. So please go on just like this :)
Anon
9/2/24, 2:09 PM
@Pcm Oh definetly the beastfolk are still not entirely right in their actions. However as the demons begin encroaching upon them something tells me they'll begin to spot their own hypocrisy. Some of them will- I'd guess at Hans figuring it out. Eddie sort of remembering Collin is interesting, but I feel it's a tad strange how the grandmaster who also had a close relashionship with him doesn't even remember him. Personally, I think Eddie is just going to assume he was hallucinating due to some magical shenanigans and move on. Whatever dream he had may be pleasant compared to this awful new world, but he can't afford to mire himself in it. And since it never existed, why fret over it? The demons certainly aren't doing that. For the soul, I believe that ultimately the soul is immortal. Peoples deeds can change who they are, but those are choices people make. Though events that are major can influence this in how people react. The nature of the soul is a complicated thing. The way I was raised has death be an event that causes the soul to experience the ability to see things which were concealed. All things must perish, and eventually in the distant future, so too will the demons. In that moment, I suspect the enchantments on them will be undone, but by then it will be too late to do anything. They will only be burdened by their grief and guilt. The necromancer king is about to become a problem isn't he? Collin was in the dungeon and didn't see him- where did he go? Now thats yet another thing to worry about. Personally, I want Eddie to escape far away and heal. Something tells me a much worse fate awaits him however. But a part of me wants forlorn to try to seduce and fail. Because if Collin never existed, any connection between them does not either. I want him to be free. Let him be with his grief, but be himself. Better than than be killed in spirit and made something else. The demon overlord has ultimately made his victims mindless and puppets for his own wicked ambitions- he has gone so far as to rewrite reality and kill what was human of them in spirit. No matter how much pleasure can be found in his realm, it is ultimately at a horrifying cost. Maybe the ability to heal folk is one thing, but the madness that comes with it is cursed. No matter how much the happiness over the familial reunion is real, the real cost of how it came to be must be kept in mind, at least in my view. The scariest thing is that to some extent it never feels that bad looking in at first, but think a bit more and the demons reveal themselves to be a true horror. As for my scenario regarding forlorn in the north attempting to tempt Eddie, I see that as a somewhat happier ending. Eddie resists and remains himself, and ultimately forlorn either gives up or has to start asking himself some difficult questions about what is truly going on- if his human memories were essentially fake why does this human who is not his family seem to stir him up so emotionally? Who is he? What happened in the past? Why can't he remember? It would become that he can no longer have a desire of his realized, even despite his demonic nature. At this point, forlorn might wind up figuring out that in reality, the life he has memories of as a demon are the lie, but that's all he has been. He might not care too much, but at the same time, he might be jealous of human Collin and Eddie for what they had (imagine being jealous of yourself) and how despite being a demon, he cannot have that. Eddie continues to march to his own beat. This might end with a stalemate where forlorn can only pine over Eddie from afar, but can never have him- such is the price of his pleasure, while Eddie is liberated and free, able to work through his guilt and trauma in the north with loved ones, develop a platonic relashionship with Jason, and have adventures in the north. Eddie may never be who he was, but he will survive. And forlorn simply has to come to terms that he now has no place in that new life Eddie has made, and that it doesn't matter how much pleasure he gluts himself on with his family- Eddie will always remain out of reach. That isn't really a tragedy in my eyes. Eddie is able to heal, and a demon- even if just one with forlorn- is faced with some consequences, even indirectly. Essentially, Eddie enchanting himself to be unable to feel sexual desire or having a dulled ability to do so due to the trauma of witnessing the demon invasions pretty much works as intended, and his disconnect with forlorn due to Collin never existing in this new reality backfires upon forlorn. He has already made his namesake happen to Eddie, and now he can't get anything else. Unless forlorn is ready to look into the skeletons in the closet of the infernal realm and not be as he was, he can't get what he wants. And that would be interesting- to see a demon constantly feel off kilter and paranoid that something isn't right. The demons winning on the other hand I think is still rather terrible regardless- as you've mentioned, they are insidious- any victory they have won't be a good thing in the long run. With the demons, subjugation by power I believe is present. Amidst all the pleasure, the demon overlord essentially psychologically broke everyone and turned them into pawns subject to him. They might not look like they are like that amidst all the pleasure, but since the overlord embodies free hedonism and they are unable to ever be anything else now, they are paradoxically free if one takes a cursory glance upon them, but look deeper and one can tell that tbey are subjugated. Granted, some people in this subjugation have found happiness, but it still is subjugation

Pcm
9/2/24, 2:49 PM
@[Anon](/user/show/10049352) You mentioned sonething interesting about syncreticism. In this world gods are very much real, and the Primal Beast is an active one. How would that translate to the refugees who cannot just refuse to accept the Primal Beast when it is tgrough His power that kept them safe there for the moment? Here is something fun to think about. To Forlorn, he has lived an indeterminable amoubt of times as demons (tine flows strangely in the Infernal Realm). He has lived for but almost two decades in his imaginary time as Collin. The people he knows as Collin makes up so little of the time he has been a demon. Nevertheless, to demons, pleasure is pleasure. There is no need to deny himself anything he wants, after all, if he can make Eddie joins him, even to sate Collin's longign, the rwo can make real memories together. Assuming that there is enchantment, if you have lived under the enchantment for centuries when you have lived for much shorter than that without it, would your real self not be one with the enchantment?

Pcm
9/2/24, 3:02 PM
@[Pcm](/user/show/10039396) The demons, I think, represent a question of morality beyond selfish and selflessness. In moralistic stories, the dilemma is beween acting for your own plesdure or acting for others. To the demons, the chocie is there for you to find pleasure alongside everyone you love and literally anyone one else in the world - heck the ebtire world. Ultimately, the demons are true eldritch horror, but paradoxically one we can easily understand. If Eddie does find his own happiness independe t of Collin, it will be a long and arduous process, but certainly possible. Of course, giving in to his imaginary fantasy of a happy life with the man of his dream is rather pleasurable...but that is only a fantasy of a reality that has never existed. The Demon Overlord is certaibly sinister. He is especially salty over his loss against the Dawn and Dusk, and ge is primibg for vengeance. Funny, people were rooting for Gil to succumb and take the Easterners with him, but it is tge opposite here...

Anon
9/2/24, 3:58 PM
@[Pcm](/user/show/10039396) To me the demons are in a way very selfish, thiugh they likely see that selfishness as being selfless. The way they are is that they have let their desires rule over them to the expense of others that are not in their immediate circle. They also don't care about how they convert those in their circle as to how they played off Collins clear emotional distress. They also don't seem to care much about how they essentially murder people in spirit- all in the name of pleasure. I'm sure they probably see this as liberating and a gift to spread, but that ultimately has the idea of pleasure before all else baked into it. They do show signs of kindness, but they are in a way very selfish and cruel. They have in a way, devoted themselves entirely to pleasure and have in a way, made it a thing of worship to them. To them, they likely see their actions as liberating people from the cruelties of life, but in reality it's merely replacing one form with the other- the new form simply hiding itself better in the fine print. Eddie I think with no connection to Collin now should just get moving to the north. Him chasing a dream that never was would be utter madness at this point and would simply lead to him being demonized. He knows what forlorn has done (eleven is catatonic now and may be healable but will still likely have scars from what has happened), and he is not foolish. Unlike Collin, he has no idealistic hope that somehow the demons are not too far gone. I hope that Eddie does escape. He had no connection to Collins family, and Collin doesn't even exist anymore practically. So he's only going to focus on the fight. So forlorn may tempt him, but without any emotional connection, I hope he fails. Forlorn is essentially a twisted Collin, so I doubt Eddie would find that appealing. And I sincerely hope he isn't dumb enough to try to do that. I think the reason for why nobody wants the demons to win is because you've shown rightly so how sinister they can be. Gils transformation was euphoric and in defense of his people amidst what could have been eastern prejudice and worse if they had fled. Collin in his conversion dies in spirit with Eddie's name on his lips in clear panic and not wanting to go and becomes a husk of himself in a way- not physically, but the healer who cared for others is long dead now, and is now a threat to the entire world at large. Eddie deserves more than having to get involved with that. He's already lost enough. Him losing his own identity would be less a happy ending, and more a culmination of tragedy. He was born a pawn to his father and abused, and if he winds up converted will die in spirit to a demon whose sole job is to bring despair to others while chasing a lover who is no longer real, while what remains of his lover that never was essentially violates his sense of self. Regardless of any pleasure involved (whoch I'm sure forlorn is great at giving), that is essentially what Eddie's fate would boil down to should forlorn get him.
Anonymous
9/2/24, 3:37 AM
Happy ending “for now”. It sounds like something bad will happen to the demon family, and it may be happened to the now demonfied Collin. According to you, Forlorn remembers his time as Collin, but Eddie doesn't remember who Collin is, and think Collin as Forlorn, the demon prince. Which would likely cause a very depressing event to unfold. My way of thinking is that, Forlorn wants Eddie to joins him, bringing his family to corrupt him, but Eddie already being broken (not knowing who Collin is, the feeling of missing something important to him, and the fact that his friends are being rendered immobile by Forlorn, knowing that East is entirely screwed and he likely won't get far from East), so he killed himself before Forlorn could do anything about it, making Forlorn break down and his family attempted to confort him (I don't know if that's what will happen since he's now a demon). It's a very likely scenario to happen, for someone who crossed the despair event horizon like Eddie. It's just there won't be any demon stopping him. Or another scenario, where Eddie killed Forlorn in an attempt to save the East when he almost succumbed to Forlorn. He eventually remember Forlorn as Collin, crying and begging for him to respond, with the demon already dead. The family may be tempted to kill Eddie, but they will be in so much grief that they cried alongside Eddie. The demon overlord knew that Forlorn is his most important asset in conquest, but without him, he could only retreat with the remaining demons for another conquest. Forlorn tries to convert Eddie will not be successful, as Eddie don't remember who Collin is and would likely not be tempted to join with Forlorn. Maybe Forlorn could tell Eddie, but Eddie will still be clueless as to what he said, only having a very depressing feeling inside him. Eddie may give up and let the demon corrupt him, but I doubt it, if he really give up, he may just die rather than being turned into a demon, which is depressing to see. Of course, those are my speculation, everything is up to the author of this story, after all. It may be too dark, since either one of them may lose their life, but it's a very realistic way to happen. I would like to see if there's an what if story about these two scenarios, and how it will affect the ending of this story.

Pcm
9/2/24, 2:07 PM
@Anonymous The former scenario is so dark. Eddie has always been resolute and determined and hopeful, he wants to protect innocent people at all cost, just likehow collin wants to heal others. If he becomes suicidal, he would seek out death in battles more likely. That is one possible scenario, yes? No comment on the second one.😀 Is eddie strong enough to kill forlorn?
Anonymous
9/1/24, 11:41 PM
Nooo not memory lose , man I just want eddie and Collin to be together with all their memories

Anonymous
9/1/24, 11:58 PM
But I do have hope in eddie saving collin as a way to parallel collin saving eddie . I don't think he will return human though but I do think he will be against the Lord changing reality and memories . I think the story's true solution corny as may it be is true love . Even though I think chance of this happening is like 0.11111 I think I still have hope for a miracle like to happen

Pcm
9/2/24, 12:22 AM
@Anonymous The memory loss is on Eddie's end only. Collin remembers everything perfecrly. And it is not really memory loss, because reality has simply veen rewritten to fit the new narrative. I like the story where love conquers all...sometimes. Maybe it will conquer, but not in ways you expect.

Anonymous
9/2/24, 6:40 AM
@[Pcm](/user/show/10039396) but I do think something will go wrong with the Lord's plan because I can sense a theme in this story of how the higher establishment taking advantage of people less unfortunate like the grandmaster and Eddie's father, I feel like something bad will happen to the Lord

Anonymous
9/2/24, 7:38 AM
@Anonymous Will have to wait and see, and I agree, there's indication that something would happen to the demons, with Pcm mentioned the part “The demons have their happiest ending possible for now.” With how the theme always being mentioned throughout the story, the demon overlord may have something unexpected happen to him.

Pcm
9/2/24, 1:59 PM
@Anonymous Would tge demons' complete victory be so bad? 😀😀😀
Anonymous
9/2/24, 1:05 AM
This is probably the worst thing you have done to Eddie, not only losing memory of his beloved, he will remember Collin as Forlorn, the demon prince. I know things only gone downhill from here, but give the couple a chance here, man... That said, Forlorn do look attractive as a demon.

Pcm
9/2/24, 1:04 PM
@Anonymous Are you sure? I can do worse, I think. Hmm... Forlorn is indeed very handsome as a demon. Who could resist that smile of his?

Anonymous
9/2/24, 1:17 PM
@[Pcm](/user/show/10039396) By the way, there are speculations regarding the way you say a line in the comments, what's your thoughts about it? And will the theme mentioned by someone here will occur again in this story?

Pcm
9/2/24, 1:52 PM
@Anonymous That is spoilery. I mean, what would even qualify as a good or a bad ending in this case? The ones where the demons win? The ones where they lose? They are spot on that the subjugation of people by those in power is a theme here. Does that theme apply to the demons? Theirs is a society where everyone is mindlessly blissful, after all. What the Overlord did, was that not kibd of hin to share his power with his favored henchmen.
Anonymous
9/2/24, 1:29 AM
@Pcm There are only two chapters left, a short one about the Grandmaster, and the king right? With how dark this is going, the only ways Eddie could have his happy ending is leaving the East, or get transformed by Forlorn. No matter what, Eddie already a broken man, and I could only for the best with Eddie in the end. Collin as Forlorn will remember everything, using that to his advantage to transform Eddie, will be truly terrifying and tragic.

Pcm
9/2/24, 1:15 PM
@Anonymous Yes. Well, depending on the length, I might split them further. But the idea is basically that. Two chapters which would conclude the three storylines: Eddie's fate, the Grandmaster and tge Necromancer King, and the Kingdom's destiny. Eddie is easily the most tragic character I have ever written (along with Lys), he can only lose and lose.

Anonymous
9/2/24, 1:22 PM
@[Pcm](/user/show/10039396) Wow, Eddie really had it rough here, doesn't he? It makes me depressed seeing Eddie suffering times and times again. I just wish for the guy to have his happy ending here, but with you, the probability of it will be close to none, and I'm afraid to see what will occur next to Eddie.

Pcm
9/2/24, 1:49 PM
@Anonymous C'mon. My characters always end up blissfully happy, don't they?
Musclefan123
9/2/24, 2:19 AM
I hope that Eddie and Colin can be together, even if only as demonic husbands of a sort. Especially since demons seem to still care about their mortal loved ones, so I imagine forlorn wishes to have Eddie by his side. I can imagine Eddie is probably going to struggle resisting joining him, while forlorn is trying to have Eddie join him and regain his lover . Maybe even the rest of the family joining in on making Eddie succumb, and Eddie transforming into a true demon as well. As their first corruption of existence

Pcm
9/2/24, 1:48 PM
@[Musclefan123](/user/show/10053226) Collin could live out his secret kink of having his father ram his boyfriend. (Not canon) The problem remains if Eddie would see Forlorn as Collin at all, especially since Collin never really existed here.
Anon
9/1/24, 11:40 PM
Firstly, let me congratulate you for making me so emotional over this chapter that I had to sit down and take a break. On the other hand, I really did hope Collin would make it, but....this is tragically more likely. Between the severe guilt, trauma and demonic shenanigans, he didn't stand a chance. The dissonance between the happiness of the demons , the familial air, and the terror the demons cause and are is done in such a way that it never feels dissonant. Collin is just so lost for most of this chapter after what he did, and it shows. He just wants the pain to end. No wonder he's called forlorn now. Seeing Collins family turned into full demons by the main fellow is basically the death knell. From what I can see, the demon went and basically re wrote reality to make them believe in what he invoked. Either that or they really were just a demonic breeding plan result. It's tragic either way. And the worst part is that Collin as forlorn does look beautiful. Handsome even. And yet...that's not him. He died screaming for Eddie. And that makes it all the more terrifying. Lys and Eleven are either dead or gone. Eddie is going to likely meet an awful fate. He cannot even remember Collin, and forlorn likely doesn't either. It's all over now. The beastfolk are about to have their wish of Collin and his family dead fulfilled in the worst way possible. The north is the only refuge left. You've written a story where everyone has been so complex and multifaceted, and the spots of hope you've shown made me hope as well. But I think that with how the demons are...this was inevitable. This is the story of the fall of the east.

Anon
9/1/24, 11:48 PM
@[Anon](/user/show/10049352) However, I think there is still hope. The north, and the beastfolk might ironically become better amidst all of this. I hope Eddie survives. Maybe if forlorn meets Eddie things can get better...but considering how hope caused Collin to tragically fail, maybe it's best they stay far away. I mean...it's not like forlorn remembers Eddie since Eddie can't remember him right? ...I really hope Eddie doesn't wind up stalked by forlorn. That would be true horror. Perhaps now, the hope for the future lies in gil's sons. How ironic then...their father indirectly contributed to all of this, and now his sons will combat what has come to pass. The demons are strong, but reckless hedonism I believe will always undo itself in the end- it cannot sustain itself. Evil in the end always destroys itself. So let the demons entertain themselves for a time...their doom will come. It may not be now, or any time in the direct future, but it will come. I hope the survivors can rebuild their lives and heal amidst the grief. This may be the end of the east, but it may not be the end of fighting against the demons. The worst part is that I can also see why the demons are so happy- free from the worst of Eastern cultural abuses. But they pose a threat to all. I think one can pity them, understand them, but also fear them. They are sensual and terrifying, yet tragic as well.

Pcm
9/2/24, 1:24 AM
@[Anon](/user/show/10049352) Thank you. It is making me somewhat sad as well. To Collin's credit, despite lapsing at times, he held on right until the end. It took the demon basically rewriting his past to make him have always been a demon to finally make him succumb. I mean, what can you do against that? The demons have their happiest ending possible for now; tgeir family reunited and rewritten in such a way that tragedies had never even occurred to them. They have always been together, indulging themselves and each other with mindless lust. Thw Infernal Realm is the realm of chaos, where its landscape and history are malleable to change. The Overlord did not alter their memories (the demons pretty much remembered all their human self and have their memories, they just don't care), he shifted the reality to make them have always been demons native to the infernal realm. In the infernal realm, they were actually born and raided there, you would find all traces of their growing up in the infernal realm as that is the new reality. The idea is for Collin to be an incubus-esque demon. He is meant to be conventionally attractive to as many people as possible. It is his method of corruption. He was born from erotic dreams after all. His spswns would share his attrractive features. Lys is Eleven, btw. Think Grandmaster cam heal her? Ironically, the Wolfmen no longer remember their death threats to Collin. In this new reality, they just knew that the King went crazy and made a deal with some powerful demon prince just to keep Aaron from them.

Anon
9/2/24, 2:17 AM
@[Pcm](/user/show/10039396) In a way this reminds me of the video game persona 2, where slight changes alter the fabric of reality into something completely different, and going back isn't an option. In doing so, the beastfolk have become less malevolent in a way, as now the real issue began with the easterners cavorting with demons. I wonder how the grandmasters and the others had their memories over written. The kingdom of the east is doomed anyway. Fleeing is the only option now. In a way, with reality being rewritten, the human aspects of Collin and the others are essentially fake and don't matter. So in reality, Eddie and the others could simply deny they ever knew forlorn. He might chalk up the feelings to some magical shenanigans. But something tells me he's about to meet forlorn in a very bad way. I don't blame Collin for falling. He literally was able to handle himself until the big demon went and rewrote reality. There's not much to be done in the face of that. Collin as forlorn is beautiful, but will he as per his namesake bring people to despair, or is his name a sigil moreso about how the east is truly doomed? Something tells me his pleasure would be slow and sensual, and he might even retain his healer attitude in a way. I think the grandmaster may be able to figure something out. But I think what's fascinating here is that Eddie might just not fall for Collin as forlorn because technically- Collin never existed in this new reality. Those are just fake memories. And Collin as forlorn will never be that person again. So in reality, Eddie shouldn't really have any affinity to forlorn anyway. Something tells me Collin will though. I think one alternate timeline that makes me wonder is one where Eddie sees the situation as too far gone and retreats to the north, trying to move on with his life. Cue forlorn slinking in and trying to tempt him in the fashion of the tempting of the forty days in the desert with christ. Yet Eddie, since he has no connection to forlorn and due to being justifiably traumatized over anything demonic, wants nothing to do with him (maybe he figures out a way to magically shut down his ability to sense pleasure to belay demonic strategies), leading to forlorn increasingly trying to get what he can't have, and wondering why he's so obsessed over this human- I mean- it's not like he was actually human, just made to be one for a while- so why does he want this boring human? Why is he special? Sure, he knew him, but he couldn't have been that special? After all, if they don't care about their human memories, they probably don't care about most of the humans in them. This probably contradicts a lot of your established lore principles though, so it's more a personal what if scenario. The way you say "happy ending for now" seems to imply things could still change. The demons might not be out of the woodworks yet, and honestly I'd be glad to see them knocked down a peg.

Pcm
9/2/24, 1:46 PM
@Anon Your definition describes tge demons perfectly. I wouldn't say the Beastmen aren't in the wrong. Thye still did try to convert the East through the King. They never expected the King to go crazy and struck a deal with a demon prince. They were livid at that, unable to recognize their hypocrisy. They still attempted to get back by doing the kidnapping though. For the Grandmaster and Eddie, they simply lived their life, but without Collin. Eddie, who was very close to Collin in particular, experiences a dissonance between his love, like he has lived a happy life instead of a cold empty one that is the current reality, onky to wake up and realizes it is all a dream. Worse, he can no longer remember that dream. I brought up the concept of the Vinnana, easily most understood as the soul which exists. However the perception around it twists and changes, the soul is still the same. Is one's personhood defined by that soul, or is it the experiences surrounding it? Or is it perhaps something else? Your potential scenarios, as always, are interesting and tragic. I would love to explore them some times. Since no one pointed it out yet, the Necromancer King was not in the dungeon, was he?
Sep 2, 2024
9/2/24, 1:34 PM
Fun and hot little story! Thanks!
9/2/24, 1:00 PM
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