Hot as fuck. I want a third.

What a great story! So fucking hot! More please of Dante and his puppy.

Thanks again for these very generous and encouraging comments! Paul's post particularly moved me.

Nice to see your own take on the "Calving Signs" slash Charles Wallace or bovine tf genre. In terms of ideas its consistent and the set up is great. I don't have any more *ideas* to give. You have a solid one. The scenarios and the victims are relatively familiar but distinct with web of pre-existing relationships and ongoing changes and ups and downs. But the set up is simplifying them so it helps you to avoid things getting out from your control. Good catch there too. But in terms of execution I think there is some room for improvement. I love the bit with the dad in the briefs. The idea of gluttony changing attitude, mentality, sexuality and appearance. But I feel the uhm "imagery" isn't used to the fullest. The sensual tastes and experience of the eatting of juicy meats leading to male form leading to sex. You have the outline, the direction. And yes I appreciate the character set up. Really this reminds me most of that one story with "I wanna be a musclehead. With a really big dick and a fucking hot butt" Part of what is missing, to me is you're a little distant in the perspectives telling us or summarizing when it feels we should be inside, seeing and feeling it. Even if this is an observer at a remove ... You do great with the scene in the bathroom. But instead of drawing out the flamboyant guys transformation you go straight to "his bovine voice" as if we won't get it so we're slammed to the end of the character's reaction and the conclusion as to drawn along or teased akin to the character whose perspective we share. I guess mainly I want to compliment the effort, want more but not in length but in richness of quality which you give in spurts and seem to be doing more of. I like that the father is the typical homophobic asshole but also has decent points. I like that the gay son seems your super liberal hipster, sorta, with "I'm too good for here" but NOT a loner, has a history, and STILL has affection for his dad and friends. It stings all the more as they change around him and he feels scared or freaked out from their opposing behavior, slightly intrigued, but mostly concerned and confused. I guess after you're finished with this we can see a sort of revised version or sequel where, like all the greats you can use your set up and ideas again and again to refine and improve them.

Please never stop writing. Your pacing is wonderful, and you maintain an excellent balance between the parts of the story you 'show' and the parts you more overtly 'tell.' Such a gift. I have been trying to write a story for ages in the hope that, with enough editing, rewriting, and input, it can satisfy in the way that Scott's story does.

Perfectly writen.......more of it please

Nice!! So many directions this could go!

Thanks for the feedback. I do agree that it ended a tad abruptly, and I may revisit this story to extend out the fun after the fall. The mental breakdown is always the part that gets me going the most, sometimes I forget to allow the readers to enjoy the sex part too. Will have to work on that.

Damn that was hot

What a wonderfully imagined and well-written story! It really resonated with me. I'm a long-married senior (just turned 65) with a wife I dearly love and two great kids that I'm really proud of. I'm also a closeted gay man and I've often thought about what if I could, like Scott, go back in time to my college days and have the courage to admit to my family and friends that I was a "homo-sexual" (the polite term when I was young). What I have been happier? Maybe. Had a more satisfying life? Possibly. I guess I've been lucky enough to end up where I am with many things to be grateful for. Thank you so much for writing something that I'll certainly come back to read again and again but keep thinking about what if...?