Recent Comments

Anonymous
2/19/17, 5:57 AM
I'm liking the emasculation!
Feb 18, 2017
Kyle
2/19/17, 5:17 AM
Great story. Interesting approach to jinxing, very clever. My only advice right now about dialogue would be to make a new paragraph each time someone different speaks. It makes it easier to keep track as to who is talking. The context and turn-based nature of your dialogue makes it work how you've done it but I think you'll find doing the standard paragraph thing may make things easier for you as well as your readers. Great work. Thanks for writing something and sharing it.
Anonymous
2/19/17, 2:40 AM
this is one of the best storys i have read as of late, really very good and well done
Anonymous
2/19/17, 2:25 AM
amazing! awesome slow build. love the focus on the mental degradation.
Feb 18, 2017
Anonymous
2/19/17, 12:30 AM
Hmm a lot of things wanderer(shadow of the colossus flashbacks) said could have a ton of fun repercussions
Anonymous
2/18/17, 10:09 PM
Loving the twink boi makeover!
A
2/18/17, 9:22 PM
Maybe a poolside bar date?
Anonymous
2/18/17, 8:24 PM
Would be wonderful if Matt decided what Logan would wear on their date...showing the world that Logan was indeed her new boi. Maybe Matt in a suit, and Logan is tight revealing clothing that showed off his much smaller bulge and perky putt.
2/18/17, 7:15 PM
Hey guys, I wanted to apologize for the long wait. I'd like to hear your feedback for where the story is going. This chapter felt really weak to me and I spent a long time editing it. I want to keep the sort of teasing feel to the story so I like to keep suspense between big changes. This has always been my favorite sort of build-up when I read fiction online.
Feb 18, 2017
Anonymous
2/18/17, 6:45 PM
Great story!