Recent Comments

Anonymous
2/10/17, 3:35 AM
@Haters Got To Hate lol Tell me where I was wrong. The story really is a lot better if read at the start of the shower scene. The introduction for Taylor and Zack were detailed in that part, and when they meet, you learn about their relationship and that Taylor is an openly gay jock. Telling the audience why it happened to them isn't necessary and making it about politics, which also doesn't make sense, actually ruined it. It's the reason why Hannibal Rising sucks; His backstory is ridiculous, unnecessary, and was better left a mystery, just like the motive of this story's antagonist.
Anonymous
2/10/17, 3:06 AM
“No way dude. You know I’m not into that ‘help me I’m a writer who wants to improve’ shit, haha,” xORRiNx joked back, almost like he’d had to defend his inertia to people on a regular basis. Cris laughed and returned his attention back to surfing better stories on his laptop. XORRiNx also situated himself in bed with his computer.
Anonymous
2/10/17, 1:06 AM
Great story!!
Cris Kane
2/9/17, 11:47 PM
Oh, Orrin, if you had hoped this was going to die down, I fear your "Grow up!" comment is just going to make things worse for you. I'm not going to get into the politics, although I suspect others will. I do find it troubling that you're now attacking your readers for disagreeing with your premise. In my opinion, which several others have also voiced, you set up your story poorly and illogically. For many people, this doesn't matter. If they're watching porn, they don't care why the pizza guy showed up and why he's taking off his clothes, they just want to get to the hot sex. Others have a greater interest in the psychological aspects of these stories and are sincerely voicing their problems with the motivation of your antagonist which keeps them from buying into your premise and the scenario that springs from it. You're a talented writer, but you've also got a lot to learn.
Tox
2/9/17, 11:26 PM
Loving the series so far :) as for the first comment and the one supporting it, I mean sure, gaining isn't the healthiest fetish, I'll give anon that, but the original post didn't simply say it was unhealthy like you, the OP posted that it "shouldn't be fetishized", completely different. After all, "YKINMK".
Exhibitionist
2/9/17, 9:58 PM
I love walking around other guys topless & in my tighties. That is an awesome feeling.
rom
2/9/17, 9:36 PM
Hot.
Anonymous
2/9/17, 8:52 PM
A pic of the crew with asses hanging out would have been hot And Willie yes if possible a follow up of his former crew would be interesting
Haters Got to Hate
2/9/17, 8:50 PM
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Anonymous
2/9/17, 7:54 PM
The introduction of the story sucks. The motive doesn't make sense. And your antagonist is a fucking idiot for going to another gay man instead of the people they're protesting against. The story is a lot better if read at the start of the shower scene instead of pushing a political agenda.