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Anonymous
2/3/17, 8:13 PM
This story see s to be about punishment for it's own sake. Eh
Anonymous
2/3/17, 7:37 PM
My thing is not political correctness, but that Zack was turned into a homophobe for no other reason than Sam's desire to punish a gay guy who wouldn't recognize the merits of protesting for something. Yes, people need to step out of their bubbles, but destroying a bro-relationship and in the outcome making a non-homophobic character homophobic does feel weird. That's what made it extra weird for me. The writing was good. Don't take it as a sign you should stop writing. Do continue. I like your stories.
Anonymous
2/3/17, 6:50 PM
I really don't see a difference between this story and any other story on this site. You want political correctness go watch cnn. This is mind control site, it's not always pretty. There is one particular story on this site about a bully making other people into bullies or worthless slaves....and yet those same readers who raved and still beg for a continuation of that story, are saying this story is too dark? Really? This story was great, I got off, and I'm sure others will too.
Anonymous
2/3/17, 5:52 PM
Good start. Can't wait for more
xORRiNx
2/3/17, 5:35 PM
I hear all the criticism... I probably should have tweaked components to this story to fix logistics. I maintain that this story has an audience... It's a specific fetish that I KNOW people out there have. Not rape... More so verbal abuse and straight cock fantasies. (real life roleplaying is something Ive explored in this sense)
Ragnarok
2/3/17, 5:25 PM
This is extremely well written as all your great stories are, however I don't personally like that Taylor was made into a victim for no good reason other than some whinny gay dude's whim. You punished them both but they did nothing wrong and you made Zack abusive and hate gays, but somehow he decided to want sexual gratification from Taylor which is another issue in your story since he was still straight and not told to do so. You are a fantastic writer, but I think this stories concept, while being unique got away from you and went a route that even you may not have intended. Sorry for the harsh criticism. It just wasn't for me.
Anonymous
2/3/17, 4:19 PM
I went back to read this story and some of the others. You must have watched the Sopranos. Lucifer and his crew sound like a bunch of goombahs who don't understand that the Boss is really the Boss and can do shit.
Cris Kane
2/3/17, 4:16 PM
Well written. Anyone who writes for this site ends up going into some unseemly areas, and I'm completely in favor of exploring the darker aspects of human nature. And there are always going to be stories that don't cater to our particular kink(s). That said, personally, I felt this went past the metaphorical rape inherent in 90% of the content here into flat-out rape. I realize rape fantasy is a thing and, for those who get off on it, fap away -- just don't do it in real life, kids. But purely as a piece of fiction, the set-up and execution were jarring to me -- not in an "ooh, how non-PC" way but in a "well, that doesn't track logically" way. Sam's actions seemed far worse than Taylor's inaction. "Hi, I'm calling about bullying awareness, and if you don't help us, we're going to bully you into submission and create another abusive relationship." And if the goal was to make Taylor know how it feels to be weak and vulnerable, shouldn't Zach have received the same "punishment", since he expressed similar sentiments? Certainly plenty of abusive assholes out there to teach Taylor a lesson without having to turn Zach into another one. (Honestly, I skipped over the final fuckfest when I saw where it was going.) I know I've written stories where characters didn't always deserve what happened to them, and sometimes you can write something without being aware how it will come across to the readers, but I agree with the commenter above that you need a follow-up where Sam gets his own comeuppance somehow. Ya know, to bring balance to the Force and shit.
Anonymous
2/3/17, 4:14 PM
In these turbid times, sometime, a story has the effect to remind readers that this world is not perfect, that bigotry and cruelty continued to rule the day, from the streets to the boardroom to the halls of government. I read this story as a challenge: rest on your laurels and you end up with a crown of withered branches. Having said that, damn!! this story was hot!!
2/3/17, 2:10 PM
I'm not saying you personally want gay men to be victimized. I guess enough of that happens in real life so I don't look for it in stories. Your work was high quality and a great read. I just didn't like the ending. You write what you want to. If I don't like it eh who cares. Just keep writing. I would never want to discourage a good writer. Peace.