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Jan 29, 2017
jpoppinga
1/31/17, 2:10 AM
Love the way you incorporate pictures into the story.
Anonymous
1/31/17, 2:08 AM
I appreciate the effort, you should just work on a story bit by bit, writing when you are in the mood, and get really descriptive of how the characters feel. Don't take the harsh criticisms too hard, but realize that they all have merit, and address things you should work on
Anonymous
1/31/17, 1:23 AM
No need to be rude but I won't be posting again thanks .
Anonymous
1/31/17, 1:12 AM
You don't need an editor.... you need a writer that can take this "idea" and expand it into something resembling an actual story. Someone who can fill in the details, and make it interesting.
Anonymous
1/31/17, 12:00 AM
This had a twist that I did not expect. I had to go back tor read the story. Then, I found the moment where Jason could have overheard Kyle's induction. Sex was hot. Loved it. I usually don't look at the pics, but the pic depicting Jason is smokin' hot.
Anonymous
1/30/17, 11:57 PM
Very clever. Loved it.
Anonymous
1/30/17, 11:55 PM
Yes. You need an editor. This was awful.
Anonymous
1/30/17, 10:50 PM
yessir
alx62
1/30/17, 8:46 PM
look forward to next instalment
Anonymous
1/30/17, 8:39 PM
YESSIR! Great story! very, very hot, and I like the way you chose to tell it.