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1/22/17, 11:39 PM
Please continue!
1/22/17, 11:35 PM
Please continue this!
cutlerfan
1/22/17, 11:32 PM
Great Story! I need some of those nanobots!
Anonymous
1/22/17, 10:20 PM
Off to a good start, and then came the armpits. To each his own as they say, and the bulk was a good classic barber seduction.
Anonymous
1/22/17, 10:16 PM
and we know this is Matt how? But it is building nicely
Anonymous
1/22/17, 10:11 PM
Nice one---once I got passed the armpits. But to each his own.
Anonymous
1/22/17, 7:09 PM
You gotta finish this one, please.
lipsk
1/22/17, 5:16 PM
Any chance of the skinhead Mark sequel?
hypnothrill@yahoo.com
1/22/17, 5:12 PM
I think your English is very good! However, in my opinion, the story would be hotter if it had more conflict. You do a good job of setting up the situation with Nathan and Brendan, but then Nathan is able to get exactly what he desires, instantaneously. Personally, I'd prefer a story where Brendan initially resists the nanobots. Or a story where the nanobots don't work precisely as Nathan planned. Or a story where Brendan finds out about the nanobots and decides to use them on Nathan. But of course, these are just suggestions. You should keep writing what turns you on!
1/22/17, 3:57 PM
Thank you for the ideas! Very much appreciated. I hope you enjoy the next few chapters too. About the strength thing, it was Jeff just going along with what Nick wanted to do. He just let himself be guided so there wasn't much strength needed to do that. I'll try to make a few edits to make it apparent, thanks for catching that :)