Recent Comments

Stefan1984
1/11/17, 11:19 PM
It appears to me as if Deck has a higher calling ahead of him. Specially when I consider how quickly he managed to unify his crew. I wonder what will await him and his crew next.
Anonymous
1/11/17, 8:50 PM
Can't wait for more!
1/11/17, 7:41 PM
To Hypnothrill: I'm very pleased that you enjoyed the beginning of the Alignment. Those are some of my favorite scenes ... when the delivery driver is going around and seeing the city's population being "aligned". And yes, I agree with you that something was lost in the middle of the story. But I know that the slow portion of the story is crucial. I cannot divulge too much because it would mean spoiling the ending. But I have to explain the methodology of The Aligned, what they do and how they do it ... because that middle part is me setting up those dominoes. And I was heading on a clear trajectory on where this story was going. But sadly, I was thrown off course when I got negative feedback regarding the incest subplot. I shouldn't have let negative feedback derail me but I did. But even now, I know that ending that I was heading toward. And I still love it. I want that ending. And that ending is why this story hasn't gone away in my thoughts. I will eventually finish it. However, I will probably post the story in its entirety because I'm not going to let any feedback throw me off this time. When it posts .... expect a massive story.
TheWanderer
1/11/17, 5:19 PM
Oh, cause you said "write another story" so I misunderstood :-p
hypnothrill@yahoo.com
1/11/17, 1:45 PM
Rubbrsome, I thought the first couple of chapters of "The Alignment" were some of your best work (right up there with "Brain Feed" and this story). I loved how it was gesturing toward a worldwide invasion, and that sense of scale was something that got lost in the later chapters. So if you're daunted by a rewrite, I'd suggest just writing another story in the "Alignment" universe, maybe set in the early days of the invasion. IMO, your most erotic passages come when you describe the Aligned interacting with the general public, brainwashing and ultimately converting some of them.
1/11/17, 1:11 PM
To nycboot: Thank you for the very generous words. I think my face is burning red at the moment. I really try to make my stories entertaining for all you guys. But sometimes I don't think I succeed. I do wonder if I go on autopilot, it get repetitive. But that's just me being critical of myself. Which I don't mind. It makes me strive to improve rather than become complacent. It's funny you mention The Alignment. I really want to get back to that story. But if I do, expect it to be a bit of an overhaul. I'd probably start over and tweak things from the beginning. I just don't feel I can pick up where I left off. So that's what's holding me up. Knowing that I have to do a rewrite feels daunting.
1/11/17, 11:29 AM
Oh no, there's more, I just got sick. Will post soon.
TheWanderer
1/11/17, 10:25 AM
Oh, is this supposed to be the final chapter?
1/11/17, 7:22 AM
The tips are definitely helping, I'm working on the next one and I am putting in a couple of things you will enjoy. Again thanks and as soon as i am done with the next one you will know. Cheers!!!
Anonymous
1/11/17, 6:08 AM
Getting hotter and hotter with each installment. Loving it!!!