Recent Comments

Anonymous
1/5/17, 7:51 PM
The comment above is way too harsh and the last 2 lines were unnecessary haha. He's a new writer, I think so please chill haha. Anyhow, the story interesting and cop daddy is always a turn on. Can't wait for the next chapter. But a little editing would help, the previous comments do have a point regarding the grammar and spelling. Using MS word would help, don't worry we've all been there, we've all been a new writer so just try to learn from your mistakes. Good Luck XD
Sparky
1/5/17, 7:45 PM
So hot. Can't wait for more
Anonymous
1/5/17, 6:37 PM
Extremely well done. Very original! Great to see another story by you. Please keep writing!
Jan 3, 2017
1/5/17, 6:09 PM
Nice story. I have a similar one in draft, so maybe that gets shelved now. ;)
Anonymous
1/5/17, 4:46 PM
Many a writer -- few are the authors. lawj514, you've got to edit. Your fine story, loaded with some many possibilities, was unreadable. Did you even proofread this story, let alone run a spell check and grammar check, all simple functions when using MSWord. The writing part is a fraction of the work. Editing, rewriting, editing and then more editing is the key. Do the readers a favor: take your story, edit it, and then re-post it. Otherwise, don't bother wasting our time with unreadable dribble.
Oct 10, 2016
Anonymous
1/5/17, 4:03 PM
If you want to see this story as a cartoon, go to http://thegaycartoons.ratedxblogs.com/stories-directory/the-model
Mutabear
1/5/17, 3:05 PM
I hope we get more milking descriptions
Anonymous
1/5/17, 1:15 PM
it's getting interesting nice mystery going on here
Anonymous
1/5/17, 12:41 PM
Editing the story would be helpful
Anonymous
1/5/17, 11:52 AM
Going well so far. Hopefully daddy makes another appearence