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Anonymous
1/6/17, 1:12 AM
Hope Ashley gets his insides creamed in the Breeding Barn
Anonymous
1/6/17, 12:59 AM
Awesome scene!
Anonymous
1/6/17, 12:09 AM
I had missed the first one for unknown reasons... both stories are, however, great and hot. I love them all and I would be glad to see another story to come. Very unique and creative but with a great potential to expand the universe. Wish you could feature the College's football coach, who just launched the program or expand it by turning nerds or normal students into muscled football studs, playing both football games and other sorta gigs.
Anonymous
1/5/17, 9:39 PM
The first chapter was great. This one is even better! please, keep writing, dude!
Anonymous
1/5/17, 7:51 PM
The comment above is way too harsh and the last 2 lines were unnecessary haha. He's a new writer, I think so please chill haha. Anyhow, the story interesting and cop daddy is always a turn on. Can't wait for the next chapter. But a little editing would help, the previous comments do have a point regarding the grammar and spelling. Using MS word would help, don't worry we've all been there, we've all been a new writer so just try to learn from your mistakes. Good Luck XD
Sparky
1/5/17, 7:45 PM
So hot. Can't wait for more
Anonymous
1/5/17, 6:37 PM
Extremely well done. Very original! Great to see another story by you. Please keep writing!
Jan 3, 2017
1/5/17, 6:09 PM
Nice story. I have a similar one in draft, so maybe that gets shelved now. ;)
Anonymous
1/5/17, 4:46 PM
Many a writer -- few are the authors. lawj514, you've got to edit. Your fine story, loaded with some many possibilities, was unreadable. Did you even proofread this story, let alone run a spell check and grammar check, all simple functions when using MSWord. The writing part is a fraction of the work. Editing, rewriting, editing and then more editing is the key. Do the readers a favor: take your story, edit it, and then re-post it. Otherwise, don't bother wasting our time with unreadable dribble.
Oct 10, 2016
Anonymous
1/5/17, 4:03 PM
If you want to see this story as a cartoon, go to http://thegaycartoons.ratedxblogs.com/stories-directory/the-model