Recent Comments

Anonymous
1/5/17, 6:37 PM
Extremely well done. Very original! Great to see another story by you. Please keep writing!
Jan 3, 2017
1/5/17, 6:09 PM
Nice story. I have a similar one in draft, so maybe that gets shelved now. ;)
Anonymous
1/5/17, 4:46 PM
Many a writer -- few are the authors. lawj514, you've got to edit. Your fine story, loaded with some many possibilities, was unreadable. Did you even proofread this story, let alone run a spell check and grammar check, all simple functions when using MSWord. The writing part is a fraction of the work. Editing, rewriting, editing and then more editing is the key. Do the readers a favor: take your story, edit it, and then re-post it. Otherwise, don't bother wasting our time with unreadable dribble.
Oct 10, 2016
Anonymous
1/5/17, 4:03 PM
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Mutabear
1/5/17, 3:05 PM
I hope we get more milking descriptions
Anonymous
1/5/17, 1:15 PM
it's getting interesting nice mystery going on here
Anonymous
1/5/17, 12:41 PM
Editing the story would be helpful
Anonymous
1/5/17, 11:52 AM
Going well so far. Hopefully daddy makes another appearence
Boone
1/5/17, 10:34 AM
AWESOME!! What a hot way to start a story, I love how pathetic you're turning the cop and that he knows how he looks like. This is great, I can't wait to read the next part. Would be great if you write some scenes with the Jason dishonoring his uniform, or modifying it in some debasing way to ridicule him in front of his Master or other people.
Anonymous
1/5/17, 10:19 AM
Good, good! I enjoyed with the first part and I'm glad to see you're continuing with the story. I like the story, but (and this may sound too fussy), the farm doesn't have much of a farm.Personally, I would like to read more mentions to the kind of things that you see in a farm... you know, some descriptions about places, tools, clothing and the general ambience. But again, that's me. I'll be waiting for part 3!