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8/30/24, 1:20 PM
Hot take! 😛😛🥵🥵😈
Aug 29, 2024
8/30/24, 12:55 PM
Woah, this is one of the hottest stories I've ever read! Please keep going with it!
Aug 29, 2024
hairyartist
8/30/24, 12:45 PM
I love it thank you!
Aug 29, 2024
Pcm
8/30/24, 10:15 AM
Amazing story! Love when a man is brought into the society of real men by fellow brothers. Is the transformation something Tim started? Want to see Adam helps others initiate new daddies
Anonymous
8/29/24, 11:54 AM
AI story. Boring from beginning to the end. Even the dialogues ... I mean how Ethan can be happy for his friend to have his dick shrunk, and the following sentence be sorry. And the next one, happy and sorry at the same time. Like I say to everyone posting AI story. Please DON'T, even the worst human written story is better than that

8/29/24, 5:04 PM
@Anonymous You don't know that it is AI.

Nonymous
8/29/24, 8:09 PM
@[Cutlerfan](/user/show/14171) He's got a point about AI or some text generation because bits of the story are nonsensical: "Jake grinned, a wicked glint in his eye. “Come on, Eth. I know, you’ve always been curious. And now, you’re small enough to take me. All of me.” The whole thing does read as stitched together or edited weirdly

Nonymous
8/29/24, 8:10 PM
@[Cutlerfan](/user/show/14171) Plus the author bio says I’m not afraid to use AI in my work, and the illustrations are also created using generative tools.

8/30/24, 8:50 AM
@Nonymous I have to say, I love the detective work that's being done. I didn't suspect AI at first, but it would explain some things. "Ethan blushed, but he didn’t look away". This sentence isn't necessarily illogical, but it is odd. I want to say that if it's AI it would explain the sudden and extremely quick mindsets of the characters (or how Jake making Ethan his sextoy was supposed to make it up to him), but it might be because this is the author's first story. I'm not sure its necessarily bad that he used AI but it needed to be used as assistance and not as the full on author.
8/30/24, 8:46 AM
Recently re-read all of "personal toy" and this. You really have some of the best writing on the site.:green_heart: Very emotional, very well-detailed, quite sexy. Superb!:smiling_face_with_three_hearts:
8/29/24, 9:26 PM
Really touching tribute, very well-written.:green_heart:

8/30/24, 8:34 AM
@[BobbyBlobfish](/user/show/700733) Thank you Blobby 💜
8/29/24, 10:01 PM
And then Kaa gives birth to a mowgli naga :grin:

8/30/24, 8:34 AM
@[Norismo](/user/show/2849185) BAHAHAHAHA NORISMO
8/30/24, 4:53 AM
I’m really loving this story. I’m following Ray and Nick as our main characters, but I’m kinda curious who the hell Victor is? I’m sure it’s been established in the story, but right near the end I want to know. Is he one of the freshmen? A senior? It’s kinda hits different depending on who it is. (And Tbh, I want him to be a freshman, because it’s hotter that he gambled and didn’t get that long before he became an object.)

8/30/24, 7:47 AM
@[KinkyNickInSea](/user/show/17305) He's one of the Daedalus freshmen, yes. I tried to sprinkle their names into the story every now and then instead of doing one big introduction round for everyone. Maybe I should have done that though, haha.

8/30/24, 8:29 AM
@[Cockatrice](/user/show/620105) oh, no need to do an introduction round. Perhaps just drop a little reminder near the end? “There stood a freshman, Victor, …”
8/29/24, 8:54 AM
Sexy! Though, I am really getting confused with the spiral. In the original Corduroy story, he/it cale as a person/thing with a physical location that was acting throught hacking phones and sending nanites-infested objects. In your ealiest chapters, the Spiral definitively gave "rogue AI" vibes, confused by human concepts and extremely tech-based (it's not too difficult to presume the objects pulled out of backpack is some kind of 3D print thing, especially if those are supposed to have the same effect as the sperm. Some kind of nanotechnologie, perhaps.) But in the most recent chapters, especially here, The Spiral comes off as a supernatural reality warper who can influence anyone, and create anything out of thin air. And now, object teleportation? I mean, we never got an explanation, so it's not that big of a deal, but when it feels the Spiral can pull off stuff it/he was never hinted to have begore, it kind of ruin any tension. And it makes one wobder just WHY did the Spiral need the slaves to spread manually. Is the Spiral growing stronger the more people it has under His power? Because I don't feel it was made that clear.😕

8/29/24, 9:51 PM
@[BobbyBlobfish](/user/show/700733) Thanks for reading so far and for your comment. Who or what the Spiral is is something jockboi and I have discussed. You have a point that my take on the Spiral is far different than jockboi's original story or his rewrite and I think that as I have written and discussed things with jockboi I have a better understanding of my version of the Spiral and that may be where you're picking up on the changes that are occurring over the narrative. There are two chapters left in this arc, but I may try to incorporate your point in the final chapter and try to make things a bit clearer. But there is an idea to explain who/what the Spiral is in a separate arc; once I finish this arc up, I'd like to get your thoughts and maybe that arc will be the next thing to work on.

8/30/24, 8:02 AM
@[New Guy in Town](/user/show/820450) Okay!:thumbsup: