Recent Comments

Anonymous
12/13/16, 4:07 PM
If someone leaves a comment that is as long as the story, then the author has done his job. In fact, I would argue he did his job well. He hit a nerve and got a reaction. That's good creative writing. These stories are not pulitzers. They are fantasy. They do not require extensive back history. Use your imagination. Candy says she'll have sex with anyone she encounters. You've met people like that. Jerry couldn't wait to have his picture taken. You've met people like that. Use your imagination. If imagination eludes you, then here's your backstory. The antagonists are massive assholes. Everyone that comes in contact with them is fodder for their unchecked greed. Jerry, Luca, and Candy did nothing to deserve their fate. That's it.
12/13/16, 2:08 PM
The series just like many hot sale " first novel " by new authors, you know there are some flaw, but you can feel the sincerity of telling a great story, and that matter most. Thanks for your contribution. I like the world settings, and the protagonist who is cocky, a little selfish but have a good heart after all. Take your time, hope there will be more chapters!
Anonymous
12/13/16, 5:43 AM
These people complaining about spelling and grammar when they can't even spell check their own comment.
Anonymous
12/13/16, 4:01 AM
After reading and being disappointed by a few, I confess I never read Cici's stories. For me, "quality over quantity" leads to a more meaningful experience. Will, it's like you're not every trying to write well but simply spitting them out as fast as you can without any care about the effect they have.
EdIam
12/13/16, 3:20 AM
Far too kind! Thank you! Still trying to find time to buckle down and work on Chapter 10!
wolfjock
12/13/16, 2:44 AM
One of the hottest stories I've ever read. In all my years. On all these sites. Fuck.
Viking Zombie Boyfriend
12/13/16, 2:11 AM
I do have some ideas for follow ups. Probably nothing with his dad (who I imagined as deceased) but the town has a lot of men to "convert"...
UchihaDEMS
12/13/16, 1:46 AM
Wow, amazing... just amazing. By reading this, its like I started reading a light novel! I got the sense of "Until Down", "Spider man" and some "Shounen anime". I like it. Its getting better. Don't worry about the time.
mindfuck
12/12/16, 10:42 PM
This series is phenomenal, so goddamn hot and well written. Keep doing what you're doing!
Anonymous
12/12/16, 9:31 PM
It's not about being PC. It's about good story-telling. And this story isn't good. Take for instance, in previous Willi Cici stories, he'll often have a homophobic character that will usual berate or physically attack the protagonist. So when this character receives his comeuppance, later in the story, that is what is called: just desserts, poetic justice, or he had it coming to him. And the reader can usually feel satisfied with this outcome. However, in this story, virtually no backstory has been given to the receptionist. All the reader is to know is that she is being brainwashed, pimped out, and later ridiculed for her behavior (which she isn't in control of). Because no backstory is given, she is therefore an innocent victim. And as a previous person commented, we are left with two "assholes" who get away with their scam. If anything, the two assholes are the antagonists and it's them that should be punished. This is why this story fails. Again, not about political correctness; it's about good story telling. And Willi Cici certainly knows how to tell a good story because he's used this method previously. Perhaps if he should flesh out a backstory and develop the characters better.