Recent Comments

12/4/16, 12:12 AM
It veered into places where I didn't know there were places! Awesome!
12/4/16, 12:11 AM
YES!
Anonymous
12/3/16, 6:41 PM
Too much use of the word then. A sentence shouldn't start with the word then. Otherwise, it was a good story, and a good start.
Anonymous
12/3/16, 4:42 PM
You are quickly becoming a favorite here viking keep it going
Anonymous
12/3/16, 4:40 PM
This was super hot and fun. I really hope to see more from you!
Anonymous
12/3/16, 4:19 PM
Welcome to our club Mr viking excellent work Love when family Is involved makes what happens that much more special Can't wait for more from you
Anonymous
12/3/16, 1:50 PM
This is one of the hottest stories I've ever read! I can't wait to see what you write next.
Anonymous
12/3/16, 12:17 PM
yeah,I hate the reversal. The nerd should win. Neds Rule!
Anonymous
12/3/16, 11:41 AM
Very hot. I like the spontaneous, drastic growth in this story.
cutlerfan
12/3/16, 6:23 AM
Interesting story. Don't let the comments on grammar and spacing keep you from continuing your writing. You told the story very well so don't let any criticism, even constructive suggestions, prevent you from writing. Your quality is good and that is what matters. Good Luck!