Recent Comments

Anonymous
12/4/16, 5:48 AM
Great story!! Loved it!!
Anonymous
12/4/16, 5:47 AM
First, the story is wonderful. It's a great read. I thoroughly enjoyed this story and the first. Any criticism offered here is to help you work your craft. Merely using MSWord isn't enough. You need to use the spelling and grammar tools when you edit your stories. Writing the story is the fun, creative part. Editing is a bitch. You should not write and post a story on the same day. Write and let is sit. Next day, edit and let it sit. Third day, read it over a couple of times. You would be surprised how many errors you will catch on day 3. Spell check only finds mispelled words. You may have typed the word correctly, but it's wrong given the sentence you're trying to write. Having said all that -- keep up the good work.
Anonymous
12/4/16, 4:59 AM
This story was great. Keep it up
Viking Zombie Boyfriend
12/4/16, 4:38 AM
Super hot. Very well written and I loved the steady escalation of it as the dad transformed into a cruel master.
Viking Zombie Boyfriend
12/4/16, 4:21 AM
Thanks, guys! Yeah, my mind has some strange, dark corners, heh-heh! And yes, there are more stories in the pipeline.
Viking Zombie Boyfriend
12/4/16, 4:17 AM
Thanks, guys! I love this site... so many great authors here. I'll continue posting new stuff here and over at my "vikingzombieboyfriend" Tumblr blog, for sure.
JasCo
12/4/16, 12:17 AM
Cool.
12/4/16, 12:12 AM
It veered into places where I didn't know there were places! Awesome!
12/4/16, 12:11 AM
YES!
Anonymous
12/3/16, 6:41 PM
Too much use of the word then. A sentence shouldn't start with the word then. Otherwise, it was a good story, and a good start.