Recent Comments

Anonymous
12/3/16, 1:50 PM
This is one of the hottest stories I've ever read! I can't wait to see what you write next.
Anonymous
12/3/16, 12:17 PM
yeah,I hate the reversal. The nerd should win. Neds Rule!
Anonymous
12/3/16, 11:41 AM
Very hot. I like the spontaneous, drastic growth in this story.
cutlerfan
12/3/16, 6:23 AM
Interesting story. Don't let the comments on grammar and spacing keep you from continuing your writing. You told the story very well so don't let any criticism, even constructive suggestions, prevent you from writing. Your quality is good and that is what matters. Good Luck!
Anonymous
12/3/16, 5:49 AM
I liked the story until you made Ryan the master.
Anonymous
12/3/16, 5:43 AM
I sound like a broken record but ---- It's called "Spelling and Grammar" check on MSWord. Write your story. Do some editing, and then go to "Review" and tap on the "Spelling and Grammar". It will help you with some of the basics. The readers don't expect Hemingway, but when don't you even spend the time to capitalize the 'i', it tells me that you don't give a shit --- so why should I invest my time in reading the story. As for the subsance, it was a good first effort. Try harder next time -- but keep writing. Be creative. You'll get the hand of it.
Slavethruhypno@yahoo.com
12/3/16, 5:40 AM
Love being Daddy's little boy. Never thought of building a custom Daddy of my own!
Anonymous
12/3/16, 5:38 AM
Interesting premise. Good writing!!
xORRiNx
12/3/16, 5:24 AM
Part 2 is coming along nicely. It's 40% complete. I think you'll all like it! Although... spoiler... he won't become gay. I'm sorry!
Anonymous
12/3/16, 5:07 AM
great way of telling a story...love it...good work :-)