Recent Comments

Anonymous
11/16/16, 12:57 AM
The first comment was kinda rude, but if I were you, I would try to images what was happening inside his head - why did it happen? Had Marci done anything to change Keith? Remember: This is your fantasy, and the more detail would be nice to get a further understanding of it.
Anonymous
11/16/16, 12:34 AM
The grammar was pretty bad, but The arc was decent. If you develop more into feelings instead of describing what is happening (or describe with greater detail) it will read a lot better. If this is your first one I commend you on putting content out. Not everyone will like what you write. Learn from it and continue forward.
A San Francisco Reader
11/15/16, 11:15 PM
I hope the professor re-educates Eric to forget about the invention of the 're-educator' completely...It's time the Professor starts re-educating many other college teachers and students while leaving Alex alone to continue his work with the Police and his neighbors....PLEASE EdLam, don't let Alex go soft, keep up the 'gay' homophobia, bullying, newly corrupt police.....Also if the author is developing a 'gay hypno's ' version of 'Game of Thrones', will he start to deal with the female characters, by re educating them as well ?????
cutlerfan
11/15/16, 9:18 PM
I think perhaps I misjudged your story concept. It has some similarities to other drone/rubber/programming themed stories. Unlike many others yours does seem to have a goal, an aim, or a purpose.
cutlerfan
11/15/16, 8:47 PM
Looking forward to more!
AeonFlux
11/15/16, 5:31 PM
What a HOT Story.......more please
Master C's slave
11/15/16, 5:31 PM
or so i thought - mmmmm means part 2 is coming
Anonymous
11/15/16, 5:00 PM
Am I the only one who doesn't get it?
Anonymous
11/15/16, 4:48 PM
Did you even bother to read your finished product? The grammar is terrible, practically unreadable. Had the story been intriguing I guess the grammar would be excusable. But the story sucked as well. Have a friend proofread your stories. It will spare you the insult.
Anonymous
11/15/16, 4:32 PM
Very nice