Recent Comments

Cliff
11/11/16, 12:59 PM
To rubbrsome: Just my two cents, 1. Those flashbacks made your chars more vivid, so if they encountered something "bad", I felt sorry, especially John and Mike seems like good guys. 2. As for "bad", there went your question: what means a positive purpose and an overall benefit? For me, it's about: a) Happy ever after, closet cases come out by mc, like "Satyr in the Woods" b) If someone was manipulated, just like most themes of mc stories, I'd like to see some silver lining. Like "Moon buddy" ,and many straight to gay and become lover stories. c) In other darker stories, I could accept a good Master / Slave / Happy Victim theme, because I know now someone would "want" it even "choose" it, at least he would be happy in a non-traditional way, like "Bad Pharma". d) For those humiliate stories, most times there is a bully to punish, or the theme is too ridiculous to feel emotional about those char. They were objectified to symbols, and I didn't think it would happen, so I cared nothing about them. All in all, I want to congrats you trying some new writing technique, I especially how every chapter end, just like the TV film episode, stop at the most intriguing point. And you create some wonderful chars, make me hope them having good lives. So glad see you create another masterpiece !
Anonymous
11/11/16, 12:29 PM
I love it Man thanks!!
11/11/16, 11:40 AM
I wish I could take credit for the bus crash detail, LongtimeFan. I actually borrowed that little plot twist from Chapter 7 of Topaz 172's "Various Techniques." And if anyone is bummed out by what happens to Carl and Aaron the end of this story, then check out my main inspiration, Chapter 15 of "Various Techniques" (http://mcstories.com/VariousTechniques/VariousTechniques15.html) for an alternate ending.
LongtimeFan
11/11/16, 11:02 AM
Fantastic ending! I wonder if the coaches knew about Carl's hidden phone, and deliberately tricked him into watching it...And it's sweet (nutty, but sweet!) that the brothers got to end up together. To the above poster: I think the implication is that 017 staged an accident using other bodies to trick the authorities into thinking the 30 new slaves were dead; that way, they could be sold off under their new identities without anyone questioning where they'd gone. It's those little realistic details that push your work over the edge, Hypnothrill! :)
Anonymous
11/11/16, 10:44 AM
I'm confused. Did the team members die or did they end up fulfilling their new lives?
Anonymous
11/11/16, 10:39 AM
So hot, The oblivious control -- so hot.
Chase Darksyde
11/11/16, 9:26 AM
Like always an awesome work in regard to twists, characters, description of scientific processes in a horny way...great work! Btw...is there any chance to see follow ups or new chapters of stories like "Sidetracked" or "Reset" ( think that was the one written by 3 pov)?
Cumluvnbottom@yahoo.com
11/11/16, 9:23 AM
Great finish. Loved the slow corruption of slave 2030.
Anonymous
11/11/16, 5:19 AM
Keep writing/editing at your pace. Readers will appreciate the time and effort to craft a good story. Everyone will appreciate it in the long run. Plus, what makes you happy is ultimately what counts.
11/11/16, 3:25 AM
To cutlerfan: I'll be curious of your opinion when the story is concluded. Whether the purpose given in the story satisfied your expectations. I'm also curious as to what stories, you've read on this website, have a positive purpose and an overall benefit? It was my understanding that these stories tell gay erotica with mind control themes / imagery. When I began Think Tank, that's what I set out to do. I also try to challenge myself. In this story, I've been using flashbacks at the beginning of chapters. It's just a way to challenge my writing and keep things interesting.