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Anonymous
10/26/16, 12:00 AM
This seems more like a side event that could happen but I'd not official. Mostly because him being broken down seems like a task one of the others should do. Quite sexy though.
10/25/16, 10:52 PM
Due to site rules. Regarding my own stories, I asked for them to be removed as I personally don't want to contribute to a site who's rules I don't agree with.
Anonymous
10/25/16, 10:10 PM
Poor Malcolm,I would have tanken him home :)
10/25/16, 9:49 PM
Gads, I've read this chapter at least 5 times - it is so incredibly hot. Please have a wonderful continuation befitting the marvelous build-up you have created!
Oct 25, 2016
Anonymous
10/25/16, 9:19 PM
really really good!!! hopefully will be my new favorite series!
Oct 24, 2016
Sanchezinc
10/25/16, 9:05 PM
Well I do believe there is some MC. It's being done by conditioned stimulus. Much like Pavlov's dog. It might not be a high lever MC, but it is an instinctive level MC, which seems more primal. Still very hot. I also like the power bottom control, that's hardly ever seen. Great job!
autoDream
10/25/16, 8:05 PM
Hello again Carl. Yeah, I tried to get some rimming in there, but didn't give it that much love :( I guess when it happens isn't super important atm, at least not until I try to tie things together. But whatever works for the individual reader to sort of grasp where Jese's mental state might be. Judging by the fact that he doesn't much care about escaping, actually (sort of) 'decides' to return to Darryl's lap, and falls rather easily to just about any stigma, its later in the chapters. I enjoyed the POV change as well. I tested it in a few stories I wrote and never realeased, and knew it was the best route to take. Much better than missing memories!! Although I suppose a switch to 3rd person might have been okay as well. Subconscious mode!! Again, I enjoy the transition from a proper induction being needed, to almost just knowing it should be happening, so it will, and it does. A few words and a swinging pendulum cock, bam! He is out. We will see about his return. I'm sure things will come full circle.
Carl
10/25/16, 7:49 PM
Personally I see this as more happening as he is wandering about looking for Chris, rather than after him finding him and giving up after escaping. But that's probably cause I like him being taken over by the other dudes we saw in earlier segments. Hehe But I do want to double up on my statement - I love the switch to dominant pov when Jesse went under. That was really cool. He has been mentally mindfucked so many times that even acts which wouldn't have tranced him in earlier times beings him under. But yeah he needs to go to the dude who 'cares' about him and surrender to him. Hehe If I could make a request I would like to ask for some buttplay and rimming, but honestly I love this set up so much. :)
10/25/16, 7:47 PM
This marks the final chapter for this story, and there won't be any more from Sean's perspective. I've toyed with the idea of doing a parallel story from Jared's perspective, but I'm working on a new story that's designed that way from the ground up, so I think that'll be the better way to go. Still, if there's enough interest, I may consider coming back to this at some point and doing a Jared story. I've got several other things I want to get out before then, though.
Anonymous
10/25/16, 7:29 PM
I meant The Island series but really would be super happy with either one. :)