I feel like there should be more to this. Like this is only the first part of the story, and the ending was added too soon. It's a lot of fun, and I would like to read more of Jack and Buster's changes.

...ALSO HOPE EDLAM FINDS THE TIME TO BRING US CHAPTER TEN [& HOPEFULLY MANY MORE] SOON....BUT PLEASE BRO, DON'T GO 'SOFT'-ON-US....REMEMBER WHAT WE'VE ALWAYS LOVED ABOUT YOUR WORK HAS BEEN YOUR DARING TO BE SO 'UN-P.C.' IN YOUR DEPICTION OF THE KIND OF 'QUEERS' & 'FAGGOT'S' ALEX HAS CREATED...JUST THE KIND OF 'KINKY',SICK & DEBAUCHED 'HOMO'S' A FORMALLY HOMOPHOBIC ASS-HOLE WOULD CREATE !! THIS IS THE DISTINCT QUALITY THAT HAS MADE YOUR FICTION SO 'HOT'....HOPE YOU KEEP-IT-UP....THOSE READERS WHO ARE LOOKING FOR SWEET, HAPPY 'LOVE-E-DOVE-E' SOLUTIONS CAN FIND THOUSAND'S OF OTHER 'POSITIVE' STORIES ON THIS AND MANY OTHER SITES....WE LOVE YOU BECAUSE ALEX'S SOCIOPATHIC IDEAS MAKE FOR GOOD SEXY READING....LOVE, LOVE, LOVE YOUR FICTION !!!

Hi Willie, I have just finished reading a story you wrote and I consider it awesome ("The Model"). I like it very much. Thanks and Congratulations! I need to ask you for a special request, but first, let me tell you a little about me: I'm from Montevideo/Uruguay and I love illustrating gay stories. I've published some of them in the net and If you want you can take a look at them later. I do also like writing stories (in Spanish) and, as you must have already noticed, my English is not very good so, translation is not an option. That's why, instead, I usually ask some English writers I like their stories whether they would like to see them illustrated. I've been doing this for the last few years, for my own pleasure and I'd really appreciate you visit my Blog at anytime to check whether you like my style or not. There is a lot of followers who like them and some of them sending very stimulating messages. Of course, I do this for fun, no commercial aims of any kind and there is absolutely no other interest in it and will not ask you anything in return except for your authorization to illustrate your story :-D I'm not a professional cartoonist (actually, I'm not an artist, I'm a systems analyst) but I love (digital and by hand) 2D and 3D drawing very much. I do not have too many graphic skills nor resources for my drawings so I have to choose those stories very carefully because they need to constrain to certain limitations I've got in order I can illustrate them. That's why I usually spend some months reading one story after the other until I can find one that fits into all these limitations. I believe your story perfectly matches with these limitations I've got. Well, since I'd love to illustrate your story, I hope you have some time to visit my Blog and you consider accepting my proposal. I must thank you for your attention and your time and, again, congratulate you for your excellent job and for sharing your stories with us. Looking forward to hearing from you soon, yours, Eduardo PS.: this link will take you to my blog: http://thegaycartoons.blogyourtube.com If interested, please, drop me a message: thegaycartoons@gmail.com Thanks again, Best regards Un gran abrazo! Eduardo

Wish you would write Football Slave by Talmak adaptation!!

Love story? What story were you reading?

Despite the humor, there is a dark side to this story. Sexy, hot, but dark.

Hey Edlam. Thanks for the good story you're giving us. It's very hot. I very much admire you doing it the way you want to and not what others do. I think it's a very respectable trait a creator of good things have. Keep it up. Hopefully the next chapter isn't as far away as the last 2 chapters lol Kisses from New Zealand xoxo

Thanks Edlam...It's great that you follow your faithful readers comments..You know we love your story & will of course accept anything you decide to do. After all your the author..However it's good to know that you haven't forgotten that Alex is a 'deranged' SOCIOPATH !! That's what makes the story so 'sexy'...Keep up the good work......

I love a good jock subliminals story, but I'm not a big fan of the jump cut from "just starting to be exposed to it" straight to "already conditioned sex toy". I want to see the *change*, what the wording of the subliminal it's, how Buck rationalizes all this, how his behavior changes incrementally. As it stands, hearing the Coach's original track was the best part of the story for me. Still, thanks man!

Thank you all for the great responses again! Chapter 10 is underway...just remember, despite this being an erotic gay hypnosis story, I still want it to be a good story. So, while it's fun to have Alex do what he does...doing the same thing with no changes, growth, or development would get old really fast. He's still a deranged sociopath...he's just experiencing something he's never experienced before. It'll affect him...but definitely not keep him from mind-fucking his way through the town. Comments and e-mails always welcome, my friends. Thanks again!