Recent Comments

Anonymous
9/7/16, 5:58 PM
You've written some great stories in the past. There are plenty of us who love your style and hope you continue submitting. Would be great to read followons from some of the stuff you've already posted, like 'Following The Game'.
Anonymous
9/7/16, 5:50 PM
Always loved this story and the potential. Hopefully now you're writing again you'll continue with the story! :)
cutlerfan
9/7/16, 5:39 PM
A great epilogue! I'm glad things are relatively back to normal and they are mostly still friends. I have no idea what Dalton's take on their new lives would be. Thanks for a terrific story!
Anonymous
9/7/16, 4:25 PM
Incredibly hot!. Just wondering tho, what happened to the epilouge of keeping it in the family?
tom
9/7/16, 3:51 PM
looking forward to reading how the son is used
Anonymous
9/7/16, 3:49 PM
nice start
9/7/16, 11:03 AM
I think this might be your most positive story! It's just as hot as any of the others too...
Kyle
9/7/16, 10:32 AM
Really love the concept of this. Well done for writing and posting this in a language that isn't your first one. English is a tough language if it's not your first. Posting a story take a lot of courage, I congratulate you. I got the sense of the story but it would be worthwhile to find someone to work with to help with the English. If you don't mind some contribution to the plot as well as help with language, maybe the NCMC Wiki Community could help too (I presume, I don't know much about it). Keep writing!
lloyd311@gmail.com
9/7/16, 9:57 AM
Very hot, well-paced story. I hope you continue it. Thanks, Wanderer... LLOYD
lloyd311@gmail.com
9/7/16, 9:38 AM
Pretty good for a first story, and the idea is very hot. But yeah, getting someone to proofread it for you is a good idea, both for readability, and to help you with your English. Thanks, and please keep writing!