Recent Comments

lloyd311@gmail.com
9/7/16, 9:57 AM
Very hot, well-paced story. I hope you continue it. Thanks, Wanderer... LLOYD
lloyd311@gmail.com
9/7/16, 9:38 AM
Pretty good for a first story, and the idea is very hot. But yeah, getting someone to proofread it for you is a good idea, both for readability, and to help you with your English. Thanks, and please keep writing!
Anonymous
9/7/16, 6:59 AM
part 2 maybe? very nice story.. maybe next for a pack and adding a little more about transformation...
Max Ryon
9/7/16, 5:34 AM
Your stories are always a treat, but you've really outdone yourself this time! I really enjoyed the twists and turns and the characters. You've sure got a knack for storytelling.
Anonymous
9/7/16, 4:03 AM
I really enjoyed this series, thank you.
Stefan1984
9/6/16, 11:57 PM
For a first story, this one isn't bad. The pacing of the story fits well with its theme. The only problem I have, and it is a big one, is your grammar and spelling. Try using a spell checker to reduce the spelling errors. As for the grammar (and usage) errors, find someone to proof read your story before posting it. Or try to use short, simple sentences as much as possible to reduce the risk of making such errors. With all this said, don't let yourself be discouraged. With each new story your writing will get better and some day no one will notice that you aren't a natural English speaker. So don't give up. :-)
skumbum
9/6/16, 11:48 PM
Wow! I can’t wait to have the brother.
Anonymous
9/6/16, 9:18 PM
Please get someone to read your work before posting. They may help you fix many of the errors you are making. The idea of the story is not a bad one though.
Micromodal
9/6/16, 8:05 PM
Great continuation! (Ty for the underwear!). I think you're doing a fine job, keep it coming! (Pun intended)
Anonymous
9/6/16, 7:15 PM
Seth is more annoying now. I guess he's gotta fill in for Dalton. :P