Recent Comments

tom
9/7/16, 3:51 PM
looking forward to reading how the son is used
Anonymous
9/7/16, 3:49 PM
nice start
9/7/16, 11:03 AM
I think this might be your most positive story! It's just as hot as any of the others too...
Kyle
9/7/16, 10:32 AM
Really love the concept of this. Well done for writing and posting this in a language that isn't your first one. English is a tough language if it's not your first. Posting a story take a lot of courage, I congratulate you. I got the sense of the story but it would be worthwhile to find someone to work with to help with the English. If you don't mind some contribution to the plot as well as help with language, maybe the NCMC Wiki Community could help too (I presume, I don't know much about it). Keep writing!
lloyd311@gmail.com
9/7/16, 9:57 AM
Very hot, well-paced story. I hope you continue it. Thanks, Wanderer... LLOYD
lloyd311@gmail.com
9/7/16, 9:38 AM
Pretty good for a first story, and the idea is very hot. But yeah, getting someone to proofread it for you is a good idea, both for readability, and to help you with your English. Thanks, and please keep writing!
Anonymous
9/7/16, 6:59 AM
part 2 maybe? very nice story.. maybe next for a pack and adding a little more about transformation...
Max Ryon
9/7/16, 5:34 AM
Your stories are always a treat, but you've really outdone yourself this time! I really enjoyed the twists and turns and the characters. You've sure got a knack for storytelling.
Anonymous
9/7/16, 4:03 AM
I really enjoyed this series, thank you.
Stefan1984
9/6/16, 11:57 PM
For a first story, this one isn't bad. The pacing of the story fits well with its theme. The only problem I have, and it is a big one, is your grammar and spelling. Try using a spell checker to reduce the spelling errors. As for the grammar (and usage) errors, find someone to proof read your story before posting it. Or try to use short, simple sentences as much as possible to reduce the risk of making such errors. With all this said, don't let yourself be discouraged. With each new story your writing will get better and some day no one will notice that you aren't a natural English speaker. So don't give up. :-)