Recent Comments

Max Ryon
9/7/16, 5:34 AM
Your stories are always a treat, but you've really outdone yourself this time! I really enjoyed the twists and turns and the characters. You've sure got a knack for storytelling.
Anonymous
9/7/16, 4:03 AM
I really enjoyed this series, thank you.
Stefan1984
9/6/16, 11:57 PM
For a first story, this one isn't bad. The pacing of the story fits well with its theme. The only problem I have, and it is a big one, is your grammar and spelling. Try using a spell checker to reduce the spelling errors. As for the grammar (and usage) errors, find someone to proof read your story before posting it. Or try to use short, simple sentences as much as possible to reduce the risk of making such errors. With all this said, don't let yourself be discouraged. With each new story your writing will get better and some day no one will notice that you aren't a natural English speaker. So don't give up. :-)
skumbum
9/6/16, 11:48 PM
Wow! I can’t wait to have the brother.
Anonymous
9/6/16, 9:18 PM
Please get someone to read your work before posting. They may help you fix many of the errors you are making. The idea of the story is not a bad one though.
Micromodal
9/6/16, 8:05 PM
Great continuation! (Ty for the underwear!). I think you're doing a fine job, keep it coming! (Pun intended)
Anonymous
9/6/16, 7:15 PM
Seth is more annoying now. I guess he's gotta fill in for Dalton. :P
Anonymous
9/6/16, 7:08 PM
Im yeah definitely the best part was the role reversal. Your stories are great. Still would like to see the transformations drawn out a bit more though
Anonymous
9/6/16, 6:57 PM
Wow...what a great story Thanks
Anonymous
9/6/16, 6:55 PM
Sorta sad with Seth, especially, just because he was purely ignorant of the effects, and it's clear that the drink impaired his thinking far more than others in the first place. Dalton's seeming a bit tragic now-- comeuppance and all. Hopefully he could learn something where Seth's a cartoonish dumb bitch now.