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Anonymous
9/1/16, 3:06 AM
Not sure where and why this is happening Maybe it will be cleared up on future episodes
Anonymous
9/1/16, 2:40 AM
Writing requires editing. Take some time to write the story. Then, take more time crafting your words. If you use MSWord, use the Spelling/Grammar check. It will help you with the finish product. As for the substance, that was hot!!! It's the control factor that makes me hard. Can't wait to see how you keep this going.
Axel R
9/1/16, 1:32 AM
Thanks for all the support guys! I was only expecting a few comments but this blew my expectations! I'll start on chapter 2 as soon as I can! @TimNJ - Haha yeah it was. Next chapter will be a bit more wordy too but the next chapters will be full of fun! @MaximDaBoss - You don't even know how much that helps haha Thank you! @MicroModal - Very interesting ideas! The only problem is that most of the chapters (The ones ive planned so far) are set in there house. I might be able to incorporate them somewhat but who knows things change and those ideas do seem fun!
MicroModal
9/1/16, 12:11 AM
I like what you've done with it so far. Definitely a hot concept that can go many different directions. Since you've asked for ideas, I'd throw out these: One of the characters becomes "chemically dependent" for lack of a better phrase on the cum of any other man but his own, but remains straight ( giving us situations where he gets so desperate for a "fix" he might suck off a sleeping guy or even attack a guy at random for cum. To go along with your theme of subconsciously removing clothing, hot underwear is always exciting ( I imagine these straight guys wear boxer briefs, but let's get them into bikini briefs, thongs, etc..just nothing feminine). Uncontrollable and unexpected orgasms resulting in cum filled briefs and pants at random r embarrassing times are also good! Keep up the great work!
8/31/16, 11:57 PM
I appreciate the sentiments guys! @cutlerfan: No, you're right, this isn't something that'll just go away. There's currently not even a treatment for it, though there are some promising studies underway. @A San Francisco Fan: Yup, that's me. I haven't really identified as a Master in a long time (I'm more of a Dad than a Master), but that was the name I started with there. I've been thinking of asking Simon to change it, but I'm worried people might lose track of me if I do.
Anonymous
8/31/16, 10:47 PM
I found it both evil and wicked .as for 'dad' outside the I hate the leech attitude would have like to see what he gained by doing what he did I think if price is right a greedy father would consider doing thus even to his own flesh and blood
Anonymous
8/31/16, 10:06 PM
Twisted fuck!! Loved every word!! keep it up!!
Anonymous
8/31/16, 10:04 PM
It's so horribly written that I can't follow the story. I want to. It has potential, but if I can't read intelligently, what's the point?
Anonymous
8/31/16, 9:19 PM
Wow very very hot story.
8/31/16, 7:47 PM
The story is awesome, please continue! But there is one massive problem: punctuation, specifically with your commas. Try using a online punctuation checker. Good luck with chapter 2, hope I was able to help.