Recent Comments

8/19/16, 12:23 AM
LOL...EdLam's one of my proofreaders. :) I also find it funny how much people are predicting things that actually do happen eventually, or that happen in a different way, but at least with a similar train of thought. Suffice it to say that while not everyone will get what they're looking for out of this, I think a lot of you will be happy with where this goes in the end.
A San Francisco Fan
8/19/16, 12:19 AM
Cedric & esp. Jared should lose all respect for Sean..and Sean should now expect & accept this...which would open the door to some [homophobic style] BULLYING [in the manner of my other favorite author EdLam.....I know their two different writers & styles, but it would be so hot to see Cedric really 'fuck-up' Sean's mind as he clueless-ly becomes a complete Sissy/Faggot while Jared is programmed to become more 'macho' in his treatment of his dad & Cedric takes on even more control, until Sean can do almost nothing without Cedric's suggestion...Time for him to move in, isn't it [taking-on the manly father role as Sean becomes the family's full time MOTHER !!!
A CONCERNED READER
8/18/16, 11:17 PM
MY FAVORITE RECENT STORY : I HOPE CEDRIC HAS SOMETHING INTERESTING PLANNED FOR THE FATHER'S FUTURE : IT WOULD BE GREAT IF HE ACTUALLY DISLIKED THE DAD FROM WAY BACK WHEN THEY WERE IN SCHOOL TOGETHER & IS NOW USING HIS HYPNOTIC POWER TO CHANGE HIM INTO THE COMPLETE 'FAGGOT' [THE DAD WOULD HAVE PREVIOUSLY HATED]....WOULD LIKE TO SEE HIM EVEN MORE 'CLUELESS' AS HE STARTS TO INTERACT WITH HIS CO WORKERS, BECOMING MORE & MORE 'WEAK WILLED' ADMIRING THE 'REAL MEN' AROUND HIM.....I VERY MUCH LIKED WHEN THE FATHER REALIZED THAT CEDRIC & JASON WERE 'REAL MEN' [ WHICH HE WAS NOW PROGRAMMED TO 'NOT' CONSIDER HIMSELF]...HOPE WE GET A LOT MORE OF THAT ! WOULD LOVE TO SEE JARED LOSE ALL RESPECT FOR SEAN & THE TWO MEN PUT 'HIM' IN HIS PLACE, ETC.....
Anonymous
8/18/16, 11:04 PM
Looking forward to what happens next : let's hope this writer's quick in coming up with the next chapter....
Anonymous
8/18/16, 10:57 PM
Great for a 'first' story. Here's hoping you continue with your writing...Perhaps in the future you'll consider a 'straight to gay' transformation idea & make the central character 'clueless' to his mental changes [?] Personally I also enjoy a slow-change such as for example 'smart to dumb', 'manly to fem. acting', homophobic to very 'out' gay, straight-laced to fowl-speaking, non-smoker to cigar addict, weak looser to muscled leather stud, etc...You get the idea.......Anyway, whatever you write, I'll be looking forward to it !
Aug 16, 2016
8/18/16, 10:24 PM
loved this. I have a real thing about biker sex conversions and this hit all the right buttons for me!
Anonymous
8/18/16, 10:12 PM
Its an interesting introduction. Please don't let the comments stop you from continuing the story! I want to see what develops from the main character's 'experiment'
An interested fan
8/18/16, 9:40 PM
I just love the way the Dad is becoming less & less of a man ! Hope this continues until he's a complete inferior in every way...Wish he would start to admire his son & wish the son would be hypnotized to also treat his dad as a now total inferior as well..A little bit of 'Bullying' would not be out of the question, especially if the father now felt he deserved it !..I agree with the previous comment, that the dad figure is now in the perfect mind-set to start developing a more 'female' or 'sissy' attitude in the household ?????
Nick Bottom
8/18/16, 9:15 PM
*Tense
Nick Bottom
8/18/16, 9:14 PM
To answer your question, yes, you can write in present text.