Recent Comments

Anonymous
8/17/16, 5:26 PM
This is a brilliant start. I agree with many of the posters here...it IS better than some of the ones where English is the author's primary language. Please keep it going!
BenLedew
8/17/16, 9:29 AM
The story is excellent so far - emotions are plausible, and the language is great. I personally find cross-language sex very sexy when it happens in person, so this is little like that. :-)
Anonymous
8/17/16, 8:58 AM
I musta jerked to this 20 times already xD
Anonymous
8/17/16, 8:17 AM
Sexy, Hot and very Crazy!!!
TheWanderer
8/17/16, 7:07 AM
I should probably say this. Some of the idea in this story is from this story from Mafisto here: http://mcstories.com/Mafisto/Mafisto4.html And I REALLY like this a lot, although I don't think this author is around anymore...?
TheWanderer
8/17/16, 7:02 AM
To be honest, I came up with this and wrote it like in an hour or two? 😂 Thanks for all the compliment. So Chester, can I actually write a story in present tense or is it strictly past tense? 'Cause I always write stories as if it's happening right then, that's probably why I always mess up the tense I'm not sure about the whole swimming team, when I said Chris has a swimmers build I didn't mean that he's a swimmer...but that could change No, he won't change physically, only mentally...at least in this version of the story 😏
Anonymous
8/17/16, 6:30 AM
This is better than most, I hope for more.
Anonymous
8/17/16, 6:24 AM
I wonder if you tell him "you are older" he will age
Anonymous
8/17/16, 6:05 AM
Very good story. Can't wait for the next part.
xORRiNx
8/17/16, 5:27 AM
I did make Zach quite attractive didn't I... :P I do want to keep writing about him........ because he was based off of my real life gym crush. haha