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Aug 14, 2016
Anonymous
8/15/16, 6:49 AM
I felt like the girls did it as a joke and their playful suggestions to the homophobic possibly gay subconscious just awoke hidden desires. But hey, that's just me
Aug 14, 2016
Anonymous
8/15/16, 5:01 AM
I agree with first commenter. It feels like a huge section of this story is just missing. Point A to Point C with no B in between.
8/15/16, 3:58 AM
Thank you so much, Bryce! I've gotten quite a bit done this weekend and will continue to work a bit throughout the week. I've got a nice little intro to the police station done...that's the next step is doing the police station scene. If any of you watched Jessica Jones on Netflix, I'm definitely using Kilgrave's visit to the police station as a bit of inspiration...you know...if Kilgrave was a sociopathic, homosexual, sex obsessed, evil bully.
Bryce
8/15/16, 2:04 AM
chapter 9!!chapter 9!!chapter 9!!chapter 9!!chapter 9!!chapter 9!!chapter 9!!chapter 9!!chapter 9!! lol can't wait congrats on passing tho :D
Anonymous
8/14/16, 8:18 PM
Nice work! I wish there was a pic of the big leather daddy too! Sounds like my type:).
Anonymous
8/14/16, 5:46 PM
Awesome. Very well written. I like the slow small changes over time thing. Like how Audry went from girlfriend to friend. Nice pace and the imagery was just hot! Hope to see more from you here.
Aug 14, 2016
Anonymous
8/14/16, 4:34 PM
Wicked Just wish why the girls did that to them
Anonymous
8/14/16, 3:54 PM
I also liked this story and the ending was a nice twist. It is well written and you obviously have a good command of English. However, it could have done with better paragraphing, the lack of which makes it very hard on the reader and there are a few typos. I hope you write more, but please edit your work!
Anonymous
8/14/16, 3:12 PM
Great story (and pic ) just would have been nice if Jack gave Jake and Josh a house boy say named Luis as a wedding present
Anonymous
8/14/16, 2:48 PM
Great story line WIlly What if a person after being contacted by S4U declines offer as one story line Another possibility could be 2 rival brothers say one a jock another the smart one And my last entry would see an abusive father or step father is contacted by S4U That his sons /stepsons (yes plural ) want to control him