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Hypnoboy
8/10/16, 5:23 PM
More mind controlled superheroes please.
Anonymous
8/10/16, 5:11 PM
Sequel please
8/10/16, 2:11 PM
To " the voice ": Maybe some more fetishes ! Like Daddy and twink, dog play, muscle bottom and tiny top. Besides, the background of " the voice " seems interesting to me, would there be a POV chapter of him?
Boon
8/10/16, 7:30 AM
If you allow me a suggestion, the game should punish a player for cheating. The transformations are always consistent once the process have begun, the changes always follow an increasing rythm, and the players are guided to enjoy be turned into Hímringyós. The modifications doesn't seem to be totally random, so it is implied that the game possess the power to direct the transformations, or even some sort of conscience. I dare to say that the game could be alive. If someone try to cheat, the game could get angry and punish him with ugly features to be third class Hímringyó (unlike the players who follows the rules, that get atractive features). A cheater could get big buck teeth with braces, ginormous feet, greasy hair, ugly clothes, zits, big ears or a potato nose. I would like to see a handsome cheater being turned into a horny scrawny nerd, or a freakish wimpy loser.
8/10/16, 6:28 AM
In the meantime, feel free to check out some of my previous stories, if you haven't already: https://www.gayspiralstories.com/newAuthor/show/2256
8/10/16, 6:26 AM
I went back in and did some clean-up on chapters 2 and 3 tonight to better pave the way for what's to follow. Next chapter should follow soon.
Anonymous
8/10/16, 6:24 AM
Love this premise and the way the characters and their stories are developing. I can't wait to see more!
Hypnothrill
8/10/16, 5:33 AM
Thanks for the critique above. Like most authors on here, I write what turns me on, and detailed explanations and descriptions of the body modification process would bore me limp. I've got to say that I'm a little disappointed about the tepid response to this story. I'd been thinking about finishing and posting a few other stories here, but I'm starting to think that my style just isn't a great fit with the tastes of GaySpiral readers.
majorwrll
8/10/16, 4:52 AM
I disagree with the fan. I would love for this story to keep going for a long time. I would though love if it could get an editior. Also it seemed at certain parts the person wishing wasn't the person who was supposed to be wishing.
Anonymous
8/10/16, 3:27 AM
hows chapter 9 coming along?