Recent Comments

Anonymous
7/9/16, 10:24 PM
Good start...love the domination.
7/9/16, 10:12 PM
Sorry, one of my proofreaders had a bit of a delay. I'm just about to post Chapter 7, after discussing a few specifics with the site owner. Chapter 8 will be posted as soon as I confirm that Chapter 7 conforms to what we discussed.
Anonymous
7/9/16, 8:41 PM
i like the idea behind it and i am usually not very picky with grammar, but this was a mess to read
7/9/16, 8:33 PM
I actually feel like I have to thank you for this comment, lol. I think a good story has to have some give and take and should make you feel...even if it is an erotic gay mind control story. How can you care about what's going to happen if you don't even care about the characters? Even if what is happening is just cock sucking and mind control? That makes me feel great about my writing that you feel that way. I can only hope it doesn't make most people stop reading...because I still have plans for these people that I hope will satisfy as many people as it can.
slave499508824
7/9/16, 8:14 PM
Great story can't wait for the next chapter would love to be a rubber alien.
Anonymous
7/9/16, 5:46 PM
Holy this was hot.
Anonymous
7/9/16, 4:30 PM
Wait! This doesn't seem like the Ben Stiller movie! [Ha ha] What's next, "Meet the Fockers"?! [eye roll]
m1
7/9/16, 3:05 PM
Great new chapter, like the build up for something next to come
Anonymous
7/9/16, 2:19 PM
Fun story, just one point of order though. If someone is to talk with a lisp, it means they can't pronounce 's' sounds, not 'r' sounds (which is known as being short-tongued - behave!). Thus, Julian should be able to say Darren's name, but would have trouble with Chrith and indeed thlut :-)
Jul 4, 2016
dougkent
7/9/16, 12:32 PM
I've read this many times since it was posted and enjoy it more every time.