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Anonymous
7/7/16, 3:32 PM
Great story Still stuck on whose transformation I liked better
Steve
7/7/16, 10:30 AM
I don't care for dumbing down stories as a rule because they feel evil mostly BUT this one was hot. I'm always up for revenge or karma chapters where the innocent victim gets theirs in the end!
Gaymer
7/7/16, 8:34 AM
A long-time favorite of mine. Looking forward to seeing anything you want to add to it!
Ruffcub
7/7/16, 7:29 AM
Wow, that was really hot. Good work bro!
Storyteller/ soujiru
7/7/16, 5:30 AM
@Sieg: Thanks a lot for the advices. I don't really know what "MS word" is (I guess it's a computer program or something like that), but the google docs thing I do know it, and I am really thankfull for the tip I really didn't think about it :) I'm sorry but it would be quite hard for me to have a friend proofread my works as... let's just say it's complicated. But I will try to follow your advices (I really liked all of your stories), funny thing is... I'm like a person with Broca's afasia. As I said before my main lenguage is spanish so, at least for me, it's quite hard knowing for sure if what I'm writing is done right but I will try my best. Hope you enjoy the next chapter :3
Sieg
7/7/16, 4:24 AM
Great work! I enjoyed the need to risk everything for a good time! ;) I wouldn't say form was pathetic, just jarring so it took away from the story a bit. If you don't have MS Word, and don't feel like doling out the cash for it, you can use google docs to spell/grammar check and save your story for editing. Also one tip I've always used just to try and catch mistakes is either have a friend proofread, or wait a day after you're done and read it as if it's the first time to catch the mistakes.
Phineas
7/7/16, 4:10 AM
Great story! Interesting and well written. Great character development. Very well thought out!
Jul 4, 2016
Anonymous
7/7/16, 4:09 AM
This was awesome. Keep going!!
Anonymous
7/7/16, 4:08 AM
Substance was great. Want to see where this story leads. Form was pathetic. If you drafting using MSWord, run the Spelling/Grammar check. It'll help you immensely. There were parts that were hard to read and the poor spelling, annoying. Writing and getting your ideas down is the easy part. Editing is the pain in the ass. A good writer does both.
OU812
7/7/16, 4:08 AM
I loved this story! It was long, well written, and I was really concerned about Tony, then I came to the realization that a muscular, hairy, male stripper is really hot!