Recent Comments

tomozco
6/30/16, 9:17 PM
Three thumbs up for you, Edlam! The wait was well worth it and you have not disappointed your followers here...myself included! ;) I think you've got quite a bit of talent in writing and storytelling, as your success on this site would suggest already. Don't let this talent slip away. At the same time, work hard and wish you a great start to your nursing career! I'm interested to see what's in store for the rest of the police force, and if there is more action for Bradley the new guy. The dark side of Prof Simons is also intriguing. Now I'll patiently stand by for Chapter 9!
Anonymous
6/30/16, 8:05 PM
Cant wait to see what Professor Simons does to his students ^_^ And hope the Prof ends up in control of Alex and JJ too
Anonymous
6/30/16, 7:45 PM
I love it please keep going
Anonymous
6/30/16, 7:28 PM
Terrific work
Anonymous
6/30/16, 6:08 PM
FYI: Telling an author that his stories don't belong on the site (despite them fitting the official site description) and that he should stop posting them is not helpful critique.
Anonymous
6/30/16, 3:22 PM
It's useful for an artist to know how the direction he's going in is being well received or not. Otherwise you would be in an echo chamber and not realize that people aren't interested in your writing. Really it only becomes a problem when people decide to start becoming sensitive sallys.
6/30/16, 3:06 PM
Very hot story and a very hot ending.
Anonymous
6/30/16, 1:49 PM
It's been fascinating to see how your story has been developing. Although the initial episodes are very exciting because the reader is discovering the efficacy of the Re-Educator, I have to say this chapter is probably the best, not because of the continuing use of the device (I said before that simply repeating what happens gets boring no matter what people are made to do), but because you've laid the framework for several concurrent threads which are now coalescing and presumably will come together in one showdown. I'm sorry you didn't introduce or briefly mention Professor Simons in chapter 1, and although anyone could presume that Alex's family was dysfunctional, a specific mention would have been nice so that this upcoming denouement doesn't seem forced - you can always go back and revise to make characters' appearances more organic. You obviously have a talent for this. Perhaps you can combine nursing with narrative writing? Good luck in both fields!
Anonymous
6/30/16, 11:50 AM
^^ what's the point of the negativity though? How does an author improve by you saying "meh I don't like this?"
Anonymous
6/30/16, 10:54 AM
Give that professor a protector of mind control or something. Please do punish Alex