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Anonymous
6/29/16, 9:05 PM
1/17-6/28, or five months, or the phenomenal success readers so richly deserve
Anonymous
6/29/16, 9:01 PM
EdIam, you did well. Thanks for the next chapter. We wish you good luck!
Anonymous
6/29/16, 8:54 PM
Oh my. I am dreaming, right! You are the sexiest writer in the world, EdIam! This marvelous chapter! With more characters! With more cops! With more brothers! And with more in the next chapter! Yet more organized! Now we finally can picture somehow the ending. Though I think there will be more twists, right! Now I think even the potential fact that it is Alex that wins at the end against the professor and Eric is not that meaningless, too! I love cops. Thanks for giving me such a wonderful chapter. You completes my life, as a faithful reader! I have more momentum to live on my life!
Anonymous
6/29/16, 8:39 PM
I forgot to say it, but Frank's backstory and the scene with his family is really touching! You rarely see something touching on this website, it is a pleasent touch. And about Professor Simons... he gives me a bad feeling. You made him sound like he's hiding something dark and twisted under the surface.
Anonymous
6/29/16, 7:13 PM
=D
Jun 28, 2016
6/29/16, 6:23 PM
Dislike does not equal hate, but inarticulate dislike is useless. "This sucked" is lousy feedback because it does not specify things that could be improved. Compare "This sucked" with "The characters are too thin and X was unrealistic even for a fantasy because...". Also, it helps a lot if people say what they liked about a story as well: it highlights matters of taste and it's nice to hear positive things too. If we make a habit of harsh criticism and drive budding delightful perverts away, we're poorer for it. I've written a few stories (and intend to write more when time allows) and the generally constructive commenting culture had a lot to do with my decision to bring my work here. I don't think I'm the only one.
Jun 28, 2016
Anonymous
6/29/16, 6:19 PM
There is something about fat guys that get me going...write more 😊
Anonymous
6/29/16, 4:41 PM
Omg after reading through the entire thing i cant even handle the wait for the next chapter
6/29/16, 4:09 PM
Thanks for the feedback, guys! Just going through occasionally and editing the spelling and grammatical errors that I missed last night in my tired stupor. I'm glad you all seem to enjoy where this is going. It's great to have this outlet again...I feel dumb having put it off for so long! I'll continue to edit it where I find little mistakes, but until then, I have Chapter 9 to get to!
Anonymous
6/29/16, 3:55 PM
Would be so hot for one of Alex's commands to be interpreted the wrong way and a follower turned into an accidental dominant who controls Alex....