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Oct 13, 2005
dickshit
5/26/16, 8:31 PM
how do some guys get so lucky to serve a Supreme Master in such a way!!!! rkglum@gmail.com
Anonymous
5/26/16, 8:03 PM
I agree with the previous comments. Phil having to struggle with not being able to understand anyone, or make himself understood, Having to Do What He's Told under fear of being deported "back" to Mexico, being cut off from all of his support systems - friends and family and his "bros." I really like the haircut suggestion too. It could be like a mistaken identity thing. Like he goes into his barber and asks for the usual, and of course the barber doesn't recognize him as Phil. He just sees another one of these young Latino guys that keep coming in these days, so he does for him what he does for all of them - the razor cut and the shaved lines on the sides. Very hot, and so many possibilities!
dougkent60
5/26/16, 6:55 PM
Yes keep the pseudo French it adds something to an already great premise
May 24, 2016
5/26/16, 1:48 PM
Thanks for the comments and praise everyone! This was actually intended to be a very short piece, just a caption on a photo that I found hot. I guess I focused too much on the image, so I ended up writing more about the sex than about the hypnosis. Will keep that in mind for future stories.
Orc_br
5/26/16, 12:50 PM
I miss some cultural/social aspects of the transformation. A illegal alien stereotype is someone who just got into a country, is very painful to be stripped of your culture. Everything is unfamiliar, you can't understand anyone, you must obey or be sent back. There so much this could be besides just being dumber.
May 24, 2016
Kyle
5/26/16, 7:59 AM
Excellent. Congratulations on a great first submission. I loved your approach. Look forward to more work from you.
Anonymous
5/26/16, 2:32 AM
Awesome start! I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
Anonymous
5/26/16, 12:30 AM
Very hot! THank you!
Anonymous
5/25/16, 9:05 PM
Another great chapter :) Would love to see him struggle with the changes mentally! But I trust you'll do it justice haha. Thanks for your hard work!
Yes Please
5/25/16, 8:21 PM
I downloaded all of the files to my phone. I want Dumb Derick to come take me to the gym, grow me and fuck me.