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A San Francisco Reader
5/13/16, 1:29 AM
After such a long wait, I must admit, I was a little disapointed at how brief this was, especially in terms of Robbie. As some of the other "what the hell, so many fellows were following the story, I guess I'll knock something out & finish this thing".nd changes... is it possible that the Author might go back & add more to THIS STORY, before he writes any new one's ???? It was as if he was bored by the whole thing & figured
UchihaDEMS
5/12/16, 10:43 PM
Well, this was... something for sure.
Anonymous
5/12/16, 9:18 PM
I wish there was a new chapter of this every day! So good
Anonymous
5/12/16, 8:53 PM
Ooh,a hot interracial story?.. As long as the black guy gets even more muscular,as the white guy thins down.
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5/12/16, 8:01 PM
haha i did go see the new Cap movie...dudes bicep wuz great wen he held down rhe copter!
Anonymous
5/12/16, 7:33 PM
Definitely felt a little rushed, agree that it would have been nice to describe other ways their dynamic changes around campus and how their lives would have changed.
Anonymous
5/12/16, 7:18 PM
This is getting better and better! I've laughed a lot with the mentions of Transformers, Avengers, Battleship and Agents of Shield. Derek should watch Batman v Superman, I'm sure he'll gonna enjoy it in his current state. He could also go to watch Captain America 3, would be fun if he gets a boner or a dirty fantasy while watching Chris Evans in his tight uniform.
Anonymous
5/12/16, 6:45 PM
Be neat to read you working other sorts of accent changes and shifts in vernacular in upcoming stories.
Anonymous
5/12/16, 6:19 PM
Felt somewhat rushed, but thank you for taking the time to finish the series. Looking forward to more from you in the future!
Sieg
5/12/16, 5:09 PM
Assuming initial was the lunch delivery, It COULD have something to do with not paying attention. If you do something enough times you can normally do it on auto without paying attention to details. Not to mention the constant zoned out nature of someone constantly getting high. By now, the sum of changes should make it hard for someone to tell the difference between the two. I'm sure I could have conveyed that better by the end of this part. (Keep in mind it's my first attempt at writing so critiquing will help improve the writing!) Remainder of the questions will most likely be answered in part 5! :)