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Anonymous
5/8/16, 2:31 PM
The people ,and me,want the new Chapter bad
Anonymous
5/8/16, 2:30 PM
I love your work dude,but look at these comments,theyre longer than the actual story
Anonymous
5/8/16, 2:25 PM
I agree the writer of such fictions falls prey to one of his own fantasies
Jun 12, 2011
sweatnosis
5/8/16, 1:29 PM
Interesting. There's no overt mind control anywhere in the story - but after Marc used the term kindred spirits for both relationships, I suspected Harold behind the scenes of course. Maybe he even made Marc gay, then slowly "recreated" him in Frank. I wouldn't have minded a glimpse of his manipulations, or if you prefer it this subtle, maybe have Frank spontaneously develop a passionate interest in a rarer kink than leather and rubber - or maybe something Marc had that Harold didn't share, but that Harold might have instilled it just to get his twins matching as much as possible. Just thoughts, I did like the very subtle story.
sweatnosis
5/8/16, 12:34 PM
I'm not a fan of drone stories, or the fusion at the end (couldn't help visualizing it as the leather basically turning into latex) but as a kid who was literally entranced by leather jackets to the point of taking insane risks to feel, smell or wear people's, this story is automatically a favorite. You really evoked that obsessive compulsive part of my adolescence (never fully lost it). I would have LOVED to learn more about what he thought of leather biker jackets before, what guys wearing them meant to him, and what images of his transformations in the jacket start to seduce him and excite him. :)
5/8/16, 10:19 AM
The rot sets in with the omission of an apostrophe in a possessive. Next misspellings creep in, typos abound--oh, the irony of a writer of stories about mind control and possession losing his mind. At the time he began listening to these files, Derek Williams had certainly read enough stories to know what would happen next, and yet the experiment entranced him so much that he abandoned commonsense and apparently opted for destruction. Perhaps his dedication to his craft led him to listen to these files in the interests of providing experiences he could use to improve the realism of his stories. Alas, he ignored the danger. He forgot an important principle of scientific investigation--never experiment on yourself. Let this be a lesson to us all. We, the observers of this tragic loss, can only shudder with horror as we wait for the next installments in D's history. Will curiosity lead D further down the path of dumbness? Will the development of D's body and the subsequent increase in the visual pleasure we get from viewing the results compensate for his mental deterioration and the disappearance of his narrative skills? Or will a savior appear to rescue him? Jack Man, please don't keep us waiting. Release more of D's emails ASAP.
5/8/16, 8:01 AM
Auto-detection could play havoc with people who have a reason for exotic formatting (say, lines of code or something). A box to tick sounds like a good idea. I like this story more and more. The pacing is good, the main character is well described and the gradual revelations about Scooter are fun.
Anonymous
5/8/16, 7:22 AM
Loving this so far!
Site Admin
5/8/16, 6:09 AM
I wonder if this is something worth making an option when authors submit their stories? Would make things easier. Or alternatively, maybe I could auto-detect when there are no breaks between paragraphs and insert them?