Recent Comments

lenny
4/5/16, 1:56 AM
Thanks cutlerfan.
cutlerfan
4/5/16, 12:02 AM
Very interesting. Don't let the comments get you down. However long it is..is fine. Sometimes I have posted a shorter story bit just to get it down on the net. It is better than waiting to complete a longer chapter that you're not sure when you will finish.
Anonymous
4/4/16, 9:09 PM
MUCH TOO SHORT, MORE LIKE A PARAGRAPH THAN A CHAPTER.......
Anonymous
4/4/16, 9:03 PM
Promising indeed. Want to hear more.
Anonymous
4/4/16, 9:02 PM
This is an excellent start, and I love the possibilities suggested by the initial paragraphs. However, as the above posters say, it's much too short. Let it sit for a while, play around with it and come back later when you've got a decent length.
Anonymous
4/4/16, 6:02 PM
Yay!!! this sounds promising! but please, add more detailed descriptions of clothing, body and add some naughty dialogues! your story could be great!
TimNJ
4/4/16, 5:39 PM
Or write 2 chapters and combine them. This is too short, but it has a fantastic premise and I look forward to the additional entries.
Anonymous
4/4/16, 4:29 PM
If a chapter is less than 1200 words, you're wasting time. Believe it or not, this is creative writing. Be creative. Let thoughts develop. Then, edit, edit, edit. The length will come.
Anonymous
4/4/16, 3:12 PM
Boys sucking cock while cumming in their diapers, such good boys...
Lenny
4/4/16, 2:56 PM
This was the Intro,chapters will be longer, but as a new writer I may be shorter then some, thanks