Recent Comments

Anonymous
4/4/16, 9:09 PM
MUCH TOO SHORT, MORE LIKE A PARAGRAPH THAN A CHAPTER.......
Anonymous
4/4/16, 9:03 PM
Promising indeed. Want to hear more.
Anonymous
4/4/16, 9:02 PM
This is an excellent start, and I love the possibilities suggested by the initial paragraphs. However, as the above posters say, it's much too short. Let it sit for a while, play around with it and come back later when you've got a decent length.
Anonymous
4/4/16, 6:02 PM
Yay!!! this sounds promising! but please, add more detailed descriptions of clothing, body and add some naughty dialogues! your story could be great!
TimNJ
4/4/16, 5:39 PM
Or write 2 chapters and combine them. This is too short, but it has a fantastic premise and I look forward to the additional entries.
Anonymous
4/4/16, 4:29 PM
If a chapter is less than 1200 words, you're wasting time. Believe it or not, this is creative writing. Be creative. Let thoughts develop. Then, edit, edit, edit. The length will come.
Anonymous
4/4/16, 3:12 PM
Boys sucking cock while cumming in their diapers, such good boys...
Lenny
4/4/16, 2:56 PM
This was the Intro,chapters will be longer, but as a new writer I may be shorter then some, thanks
Anonymous
4/4/16, 2:54 PM
Great start & looking forward to where this might go, but extremely short to be posted here. This is barely a first page rather than a first chapter.... great for a Work-in-progress site like the CYOC, but might disappoint readers here just due to the short length. Length aside though - Hope you continue it!
BankStreet
4/4/16, 11:45 AM
Yes ... disgusting. More, please.