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Mar 21, 2016
Anonymous
3/24/16, 5:15 PM
Excellent start, though very simple. I do like that, though. Some things to note about your writing: you're repeating things a lot in a short span of time, like there's two paragraphs in a row where you talk about "alarms starting to sound in his head" then you use that saying again a little later. Shake it up, don't use the same descriptions all the time especially so soon after the last time you used it. Also, you mentioned Topher's eyes were green in the start and later said they were brown, so watch out for those little inconsistencies.
Anonymous
3/24/16, 1:38 PM
Hot story. Next one would be grrat
Anonymous
3/24/16, 6:24 AM
Could you do more hair growth please on Josh
cutlerfan
3/24/16, 5:23 AM
Don't worry about finishing fast. Take your time and make it good. Real life trumps fiction! You'll finish it soon enough!
Anonymous
3/24/16, 4:10 AM
Good luck, Orrin. Sometimes stuff just piles up, and paraphilia-stories must reasonably take the back burner.
xORRiNx
3/24/16, 2:25 AM
Hello everyone... Between work n' shit I just haven't had the motivation to write. Every time I start writing I realize how exhausted I am! I want to say that I'm going to finish this soon but life is just very demanding right now!
stevenj
3/23/16, 7:45 PM
what a great chapter wish i were dean cant wait for more
Anonymous
3/23/16, 7:35 PM
Ah Ha! cop"s" ... the most marvelous thing I have been informed of now! Great!
BearBoi
3/23/16, 5:45 PM
People on this site can be hilariously catty and demanding sometimes I just hope Orrin's doing well enough to be writing happily even if it takes a while. But I do agree with the comments here asking for more mental struggle in the next chapter. (Looking forward to the gay redneck one too-- for some reason forced accent change is particularly super hot to me.)
Anonymous
3/23/16, 8:38 AM
HOT!!!