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Mar 24, 2016
Anonymous
3/25/16, 1:54 AM
A third person narrative matches your style of writing. I also love this one thanks to a nice first to third person transition. Especially, yours are amazing when it comes with a third-person perspective, a bad end and slave transformation !!
Malskin
3/25/16, 12:28 AM
so good to see this story carry on, and in a different direction from what i was expecting. I though SARGE would have been a skinhead now......good how Harrison had changed tho and for the better....thanks again for this chapter
Anonymous
3/24/16, 11:53 PM
I was hoping Harrison got turned into a bluf leathercop, but hey, glad you're back. :)
Baralai
3/24/16, 6:08 PM
Thank you for the feedback, including the observation of typos and errors! For those that liked Hímringyó please email me some ideas you might like to see in another chapter (particularly new cards). Little writer's block on that one.
Anonymous
3/24/16, 5:46 PM
Your stories are always HOT. Very well done. Would really like to see a handsome wealthy affluent CEO straight-laced clean cut businessman type being used while various gay men cum on and fuck him through his fine suit. Similar kind of debasing treatment would be even more kinky and erotic. Just a suggestion for your next story setting. Excellent work. Thanks very much.
Mar 24, 2016
Anonymous
3/24/16, 5:26 PM
Love it!!! Pure hotness!
Mar 21, 2016
Anonymous
3/24/16, 5:15 PM
Excellent start, though very simple. I do like that, though. Some things to note about your writing: you're repeating things a lot in a short span of time, like there's two paragraphs in a row where you talk about "alarms starting to sound in his head" then you use that saying again a little later. Shake it up, don't use the same descriptions all the time especially so soon after the last time you used it. Also, you mentioned Topher's eyes were green in the start and later said they were brown, so watch out for those little inconsistencies.
Anonymous
3/24/16, 1:38 PM
Hot story. Next one would be grrat
Anonymous
3/24/16, 6:24 AM
Could you do more hair growth please on Josh
cutlerfan
3/24/16, 5:23 AM
Don't worry about finishing fast. Take your time and make it good. Real life trumps fiction! You'll finish it soon enough!